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TanAngel
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since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA

0 posted 2000-02-08 09:16 PM



                 Forever
I was promised forever
Forever is a lie that I now see
You don't belong to me sweet lie
I never knew love could make YOU blind
Forever was the lie to cover that up
Forever could clear the lie, and my eyes
Forever was a way to make me yours
You took it like the air you breathe
Making it impossible for my heart to love again
I was taken advantage of...
Forever is the lie and you are to blame!!


 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Farrell - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-08 09:30 PM


OOOH I love a poem by an angry woman!!!(smile)
this is very good...nothing like a little heartfelt rage to inspire us!!
did ya feel better when you wrote it...writing is good "venting" time
janet marie

 "...she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough...I'm a little bit rusty...and I feel like my head is caving in,
and I dont know if I've ever been really loved- by a hand thats touched me, and I feel like somethings gonna give...and I'm a little bit angry...
Well...this aint over..NO not yet...not while I still need you around"...
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Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-02-09 10:54 AM


It's too bad that one person abuses important words and lessons the importance of those words when spoken sincerely by another.
Sometimes I think choosing a man is like picking out a tomato at the store: Don't just grab the first one, it may be hiding imperfections.  Look over several and learn to spot good qualities before you slice it open.
Sorry to ramble.  I enjoyed your poem and hope that you can believe in forever again, it's out there.
Good writing!
Danny

AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
3 posted 2000-02-09 01:49 PM


it's sad when people use "forever" when all they want is this short while...
That was very expressive...
see you around.


 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao



miriam
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 323
glendale,ca.
4 posted 2000-02-09 02:01 PM


i feel your pain.  The word forever is used very often in my relationships.  but like you say it's all just a lie.  Hang in there, the perfect one for you is out there.

  miriam coronado



~Venus~
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

5 posted 2000-02-09 04:17 PM


Very good, TanAngel. Does make you think...forever is such a short time...at least, so it seems...

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

*She loves, she's Love, and yet she is not lov'd*

Bronx
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
6 posted 2000-02-09 05:22 PM


Yes-
I agree with ~Venus~.
Poetically yours
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
7 posted 2000-02-09 05:57 PM


If everyone could only say what they truly meant and no one ever wanted to lie... (sorry, I'm a cynic as of late, which makes me wonder if you can be a cynic and a romantic at the same time, but I digress) Especially liked "forever was a way to make me yours." Good work.
Jannel

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