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Bronx
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.

0 posted 2000-02-08 05:59 PM


The Strong One

The other day you told me
Something I'd never forget,
You told me what you really thought,
What you really felt,

I have always admired
The way you stand tall,
But you look different than you feel
You feel like you might fall,

You asked me what
I thought of you now,
I said your still the same
You didn't believe me, but how,

I speak the truth
Not a lie,
I tell you what I feel
Even though you just might cry,

You'll always be
My best friend,
Even when we die
and we descend,

You may be
The broken one,
But I promise that
I'll never run,

You've been hurt
And you have fallen,
But I'm here
And will be here when you come a callin'

by
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


© Copyright 2000 Bronx - All Rights Reserved
TanAngel
Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
1 posted 2000-02-08 06:06 PM


Hey, this is great!!! I REALLY hope to hear more from you. What true words are spoken.

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-02-08 06:08 PM


another great one Bronx!!!
and a comforting thought...to know someone will always be there for a friend.
what a very nice tribute to your friend...
take care, janet marie
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 ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces---
did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still...
and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually...
then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart gave me away"....

Glass Tiger




[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 02-08-2000).]

~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

3 posted 2000-02-08 06:52 PM


Another great poem. I love the way you write, and I'm not lying. But you need to make sure this friend knows that you feel this way, or some unwanted results may happen...although sometimes, if you tell a person how you feel, they run away and ignore you...

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

*She loves, she's Love, and yet she is not lov'd*

Keli1019
Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 31
FL
4 posted 2000-02-08 07:18 PM


Bronx~ I loved this poem! It brought a tear to my eye, because your poems are so true. You write really, really good and I can't wait to read another one of your poems!  

 "It takes a minute to have a crush on someone, an hour to like someone and a
day to love someone- but it takes a lifetime to forget someone."

DayDreamer
Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 30

5 posted 2000-02-09 08:09 AM


You know, Bronx, when I met you I had no idea you wrote so well.  I never would have guessed. ^_^ Always remember to stay strong.  DayDreamer ((aka Jodi))

 "You can't change anything by just sitting back and looking at it."~Cloud

Bronx
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
6 posted 2000-02-09 05:20 PM


Ok-
Just to say.  The "friend" in the poem I just wrote does not exist.  I just wrote stuff on paper and it sounded nice!  Now the Poem about the friend I may never have IS real.  I think I'll post it in our school anthology.  I knew it was you DayDreamer.  'cause only you would quote Cloud!  Thanx to everyone who seems to think I write well.  Your encouragement is always welcome.  And Yes DayDreamer I do write this good!  Well according to you NEways.
Poetically yours
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
7 posted 2000-02-10 06:45 AM


bronx...that was a good one...very imaginative i must say...cause ou mentioned the friend does not exist...
liked it a lot  

 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
8 posted 2000-02-10 01:33 PM


I can relate this poem to someone in my life, Bronx.  It's amazing how we see their strengths but never their weaknesses sometimes.  A beautiful poem, I may add.  Enjoyed this one much.


Michael

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
9 posted 2000-02-11 05:59 PM


Well written.  I'll further what Michael said, you don't see their weaknesses until it is too late!!

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



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