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Keli1019
Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 31
FL

0 posted 2000-02-06 10:10 PM



Before I write my poem, I just want to tell you, that this is a poem I wrote a long, long, long time ago.   Well, enough of me babbling on, here it is already.


"Moving On..."
A single tear rolls down my cheek
as I turn and
walk out the door.
Not looking back,
Not knowing where I'm headed.
I don't see my surroundings,
Everything is blurred.
I'm in a daze.

I move on,
Unknowing, unexpecting of
what lies ahead.

I hope you liked it. I'm kind of embarassed about posting it. :0




 "It takes a minute to have a crush on someone, an hour to like someone and a
day to love someone- but it takes a lifetime to forget someone."

© Copyright 2000 Kelly - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-02-07 12:27 PM


There is nothing to be embarrassed about.  Life is a journey where we are constantly moving on.  I think it's well done!!  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
2 posted 2000-02-07 09:28 AM


i agree- nothing to be embarrassed about. moving on definately leaves you wide open for the unexpected. can be scary and exciting.
Anyway-nice piece.  


 Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear.
-Tool-

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-02-07 11:48 AM


Well done!  Those who have had "move on" understand the feelings embraced in this poem. Glad you posted it.
DH

TanAngel
Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
4 posted 2000-02-07 04:42 PM


  Keli, I see nothing to be embarressed about, oh dear, I forgot how to spell. Ok well this is definently one of your best works. See told you I forgot how to spell, then again when did I ever know how?

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

5 posted 2000-02-07 05:14 PM


Hey, Kelly! Never, ever, be ashamed of yourself, especially whatever you're good at in life. And you are good at poetry!

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

DayDreamer
Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 30

6 posted 2000-02-07 09:26 PM


Hey Kelly! ^_^  You need not be ashamed of a great poem.  Moving on is so powerful, and you captured it wonderfully in this poem.  DayDreamer

 "You can't change anything by just sitting back and looking at it."~Cloud

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