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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-02-04 08:35 PM


On The Brink

My apologies
To all
For I've not been sane, here, or there
I've faltered along the way,
Gotten lost in forests dark and dim
I've not listened to the calling
For my return home
Loosing myself in the thick air,
Thick leaves,
Bark branches srcaping my forehead
Not enough for blood to pour
But drip onto my lips
Tasting faintly of foilage-
Mostly of sour bitterness.
My apologies to all I've let down
While consumed in my own deranged world
Maybe, though, I'll come back later
To tell stories of the brink
And let myself replenish
All I missed...
When I went away.


© Copyright 2000 Kristen Joy Jacobus - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-04 11:44 PM


Joy,
this is  very beautiful, emotionally and visually.It decribes how we feel when we become lost inside our selves, or thats how it makes me feel anyway...(smile)  

 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-
remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
Janet Marie



JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-02-06 05:17 PM


Thanks Janet Marie.  Smiles to you!  

Joy

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
3 posted 2000-02-06 06:51 PM


i agree with janet. i too have often felt the same. well done joy.
i always enjoy your work.  


 Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear.
-Tool-

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-02-06 08:04 PM


Beautiful Joy, you have a way to make your pain and suffering seem beautiful.  Well done

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



DayDreamer
Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 30

5 posted 2000-02-07 09:23 PM


Wonderful poem, Joy.  It almost seemed so flowing, that I got wrapped up in it myself. ^_^  I enjoyed this one very much.  DayDreamer

 "You can't change anything by just sitting back and looking at it."~Cloud

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