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The Jackal
Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-01-31 12:45 PM


she says
i have a heart of gold
but it only helps to weigh me down
she rivets and halts the world at will
just to prove thats shes still around
and she needs to end my imperfections
just to prove that she can
doesnt she sound more like a man..
she wonders why i bother to care
she will stop the wind in its very wake
just to relish the sound
of everyone's meager heart break..

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Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-01-31 08:57 PM


Jackal this is really good... I love the last lines meaning. whoever "She" is...she inspired you to write a good poem.
take care, janet marie

 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-
remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
Janet Marie



childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
2 posted 2000-02-01 07:14 AM


Very good!  Reminds me of a couple of people I know.
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