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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 2000-01-31 12:33 PM


You want a piece of me,
Go ahead and try,
For you have already taken my soul,
There is nothing I can do but cry.

You think you know it all,
But it's the same nonsense repeated in toto,
Get a grip and face your responsibilities,
It's a place you should bookmark and go to.

I give up I truly do,
You will never admit or see the truth,
Live on in your fantasy world,
Where you play your games of sleuth.

The battle is lost,
I told you there would be no winners,
If only you had listened,
Instead of pain our house would be filled with grinners.

For the heart of this house is dying,
Not physically but emotionally and spiritually,
Any living thing needs tender love and care,
Not a world of darkness with no tranquility.




 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



© Copyright 2000 Isis - All Rights Reserved
childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
1 posted 2000-01-31 07:53 AM


wrenching piece about the all too common fall of the home.
Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
2 posted 2000-01-31 12:08 PM


Isis, although I don't envy you for what got you to write this, I do envy you for your ability to write those emotions down.
Hugs.

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-01-31 05:18 PM


Thanks Childomine and Munda  
Munda I thought it was pretty basic certainly no masterpiece!!  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



kitkat
Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
4 posted 2000-01-31 05:36 PM


I feel your pain. But do not let him win. He may have taken a piece of you but you can get it back. I know. I am whole again. Hang in there.

 --------------
You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-01-31 06:08 PM


Nicely written Isis and a hard place to be.  Sometimes you have to stop and reevaluate where your life is taking you.   Are you going where you want to go, are you doing what is right for Isis?  As you said Love and caring is the goal.  Take care of yourself.  James
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-01-31 08:24 PM


Isis,
this poem touches me...and I can so relate... find strength in your self and your words...when we write these emotions down we can learn from them and in time heal, and others who are in the same place in their life can do the same when we share our words. Thanks for sharing this.
Take care friend, janet marie

 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-
remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
Janet Marie



Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 2000-02-01 01:01 PM


Isis. . .

Your soul has not been taken
It still resides within
So, find it once again,
And don't let him win. . .

You can do it Isis. . . I know that you can, I have faith in you my kindred. . . don't ever give up. . .

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
8 posted 2000-02-01 04:57 PM


Thanks Sven  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



TanAngel
Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
9 posted 2000-02-01 05:12 PM


  I bet your going through a lot to make you write something like that. The only positive thought I can think of for your situation is to take advantage of that feeling thats when you will always write your best...
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
10 posted 2000-02-01 05:15 PM


Thanks TanAngel.  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
11 posted 2000-02-01 05:33 PM


I like this poem Isis...but I don't like what made you write it.     I can relate to this..in a way...but only from a child's point of view. All I can really say has been said by many before me...but I thought that I'd say something anyway. Please be strong...for yourself and for your family. I send you my love and best wishes.  
Jaime

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 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~






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Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
12 posted 2000-02-02 04:27 PM


lots of emotion are expressed in this poem.  it shows all of the pain and heartache that you are going through.  i liked it.  if you ever need a shoulder to cry on i am here for you.  you can e-mail me any time.  you have been there for me and i will be here for you my friend.  great poem
your friend
jesse


 True beauty is often hidden in darkness...
~Jesse C. Jaymz~

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
13 posted 2000-02-02 05:30 PM


Jesse, thanks so much for the offered hand of friendship hon, I really appreciate that.
Don't worry if I need to talk I know a few places to go.  Thanks hon  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



Bronx
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
14 posted 2000-02-02 05:55 PM


Wonderful-
I can connect with you a lot.  All too many of us can unfortunately.  This was definately beautiful.  Keep it up!  I enjoy your poems.
Poetically yours
Bronx

 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
15 posted 2000-02-02 05:59 PM


Thanks Bronx  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



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