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A Gloomy Kind Of Love
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A Gloomy Kind Of Love |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
This comes from the Workshop. The assignment was "personification", subject "love". Well, what came out seems to fit perfectly in the Dark Passion Forum. You’re a darkness creeping up my brain Mystery of emotional pain I cry you a sea of crystal tears You hold a grip on my deepest fears Sometimes you embrace with tenderness Making me burn my passionate flesh Hold my heart in the palm of your hand Make me believe I’m in Wonderland However, Love, you I cannot hate, For you are also the singing blade Of the sword of my life’s melody Piercing my heart, yet setting me free Drowning me in my own misery But also making these blind eyes see Flying me on wings of illusion Creating order in confusion While my sorrow embraces the sun The rainbow’s colouring has begun And the sea lets out a crystal roar My dreamship gently washes ashore Gloomy and painful you smile at me Love, inevitable destiny Munda |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful Munda! Even though you say it turned out dark. It speaks to the reader. In any forum that is well done. You should be pleased!!  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thank you Isis : ) And I am pleased about the result. I always knew I have a dark side too, but I felt this is the one Forum that would understand this poem |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You did a wonderful job on this, Munda! Denise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Really, really nice Munda. Especially liked "flying me on wings of illusion. creating order in confusion." So smooth. James |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Wow, Munda. This is awesome! And I thought you said, you didn't understand personification. I just wrote a few things based on that myself. I love the concept. ~Gene |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Really, really, good job on this, Munda. Great in fact. I loved every bit! Joy |
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lost Junior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 16New York, NY |
enjoyed it! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thank you all for reading and replying. You have no idea how much I appreciate it. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
This is beautiful Munda...I loved it from the beginning to the end. Wonderful! "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience." -Gandhi ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Drowning me in my own misery But also making these blind eyes see Flying me on wings of illusion Creating order in confusion While my sorrow embraces the sun The rainbow’s colouring has begun And the sea lets out a crystal roar My dreamship gently washes ashore I can but only say that this is a lovely piece...full of sweet and sad emotions. Excellent Munda Jennifer Lee |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
it was beautiful... "my dreamship gently washes ashore" i loved it... my signature says all to you... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Alot of great lines in this piece Munda! Very good writing here! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
hey munda! good piece of work yaar  loved it from the start till the end ...... CrEaTuRe |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
This is really good! Yeah it did turn out dark...but guess what. EVERYBODYS POEMS HERE DO!! He he he. "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Dark Enchantress, JennyLee, Avanti, Pepper, CrEaTuRe and TanAngel, thank you !  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
MUNDA!!!!!!! I dont know HOW I missed this one...I must have gotten lost ... but better late than not to say I LOVE this poem...a real work of art!  Im so glad I got to read it...experience it..."I cry you a sea of crystal tears" oooh I love that line and the last line.. "love, inevitable destiny" beautiful words! take care, janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Munda...yes this fits wonderfully into this forum!!! Enjoyed this very much!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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