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A Gloomy Kind Of Love

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Munda
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0 posted 01-29-2000 05:47 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

This comes from the Workshop. The assignment was "personification", subject "love". Well, what came out seems to fit perfectly in the Dark Passion Forum.


You’re a darkness creeping up my brain
Mystery of emotional pain
I cry you a sea of crystal tears
You hold a grip on my deepest fears

Sometimes you embrace with tenderness
Making me burn my passionate flesh
Hold my heart in the palm of your hand
Make me believe I’m in Wonderland

However, Love, you I cannot hate,
For you are also the singing blade
Of the sword of my life’s melody
Piercing my heart, yet setting me free

Drowning me in my own misery
But also making these blind eyes see
Flying me on wings of illusion
Creating order in confusion

While my sorrow embraces the sun
The rainbow’s colouring has begun
And the sea lets out a crystal roar
My dreamship gently washes ashore

Gloomy and painful you smile at me
Love, inevitable destiny


Munda


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Isis
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1 posted 01-29-2000 06:19 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Wonderful Munda!  Even though you say it turned out dark.  It speaks to the reader.
In any forum that is well done. You should be pleased!!  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Munda
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2 posted 01-29-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Thank you Isis : ) And I am pleased about the result. I always knew I have a dark side too, but I felt this is the one Forum that would understand this poem  
Denise
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3 posted 01-29-2000 11:44 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You did a wonderful job on this, Munda!  

Denise
JamesMichael
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4 posted 01-30-2000 06:52 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Really, really nice Munda.  Especially liked "flying me on wings of illusion. creating order in confusion."  So smooth.  James
Gene
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5 posted 01-31-2000 05:51 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Wow, Munda. This is awesome!

And I thought you said, you didn't understand personification. I just wrote a few things based on that myself. I love the concept.

~Gene
JOY 14
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6 posted 01-31-2000 06:37 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Really, really, good job on this, Munda.  Great in fact.  I loved every bit!  

Joy
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7 posted 01-31-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for lost   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lost

enjoyed it!
Munda
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8 posted 02-01-2000 02:50 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Thank you all for reading and replying. You have no idea how much I appreciate it.  
Dark Enchantress
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9 posted 02-01-2000 04:07 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

This is beautiful Munda...I loved it from the beginning to the end. Wonderful!  

 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~


JennyLee
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10 posted 02-02-2000 09:56 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Drowning me in my own misery
But also making these blind eyes see
Flying me on wings of illusion
Creating order in confusion

While my sorrow embraces the sun
The rainbow’s colouring has begun
And the sea lets out a crystal roar
My dreamship gently washes ashore

I can but only say that this is a lovely piece...full of sweet and sad emotions.
Excellent Munda  


Jennifer Lee
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11 posted 02-05-2000 04:46 AM       View Profile for AVANTI   Email AVANTI   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AVANTI

it was beautiful...
"my dreamship gently washes ashore"
i loved it...
my signature says all to you...


 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao


Pepper
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12 posted 02-05-2000 09:01 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Alot of great lines in this piece Munda! Very good writing here!


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon





CrEaTuRe
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13 posted 02-05-2000 01:00 PM       View Profile for CrEaTuRe   Email CrEaTuRe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrEaTuRe

hey munda!
good piece of work yaar  
loved it from the start till the end ......  

CrEaTuRe
TanAngel
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14 posted 02-06-2000 09:00 AM       View Profile for TanAngel   Email TanAngel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TanAngel

   This is really good! Yeah it did turn out dark...but guess what. EVERYBODYS POEMS HERE DO!! He he he.

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel
Munda
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15 posted 02-08-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Dark Enchantress, JennyLee, Avanti, Pepper, CrEaTuRe and TanAngel, thank you !  
Janet Marie
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16 posted 02-08-2000 09:11 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

MUNDA!!!!!!!
I dont know HOW I missed this one...I must have gotten lost ... but better late than not to say I LOVE this poem...a real work of art!
Im so glad I got to read it...experience it..."I cry you a sea of crystal tears"
oooh I love that line and the last line..
"love, inevitable destiny"  beautiful words!
take care, janet marie

 ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces---
did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still...
and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually...
then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart gave me away"....

Glass Tiger


Justbleu
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17 posted 07-25-2000 05:02 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Munda...yes this fits wonderfully into this forum!!!  Enjoyed this very much!!!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown
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