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Passnot
Junior Member
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18


0 posted 2000-01-26 04:29 PM


Surrender

Coming to ends of pathway's exit
Shortest routes in time's eternity
First drop of leaves dying in beauty
Yesterday's dreams measured in gold
Tomorrow's nightmares waiting to unfold
Sighted upon crying intentions
Within tragedy's shadow premonitions
Beyond destination peaks astrayed
He speaks upwards in his smile alone
But mind's loudness reality shuts off all tone
Closed rooms of passions descend
Only door reached by close friends
As nothing seems surely supported
I take one last moment to look over life distorted
Over now with no more grieves
Freedom at last, fallen leave


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Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-01-26 06:59 PM


How sad what a lonely life to lead.  If this is you I send (HUGS) and assurance that it does get better..  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-01-26 11:16 PM


Passnot,
this is a very beautifully written poem,
while its expressions are sad, your emotions are written so honestly and with grace.
I hope you found strength in expressing these feelings... (One of the real gifts of poerty)Take care. Janet Marie

 ..."She says baby,
It's 3am I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it."
Matchbox20

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