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Amy J. Renz
Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 26
Newark, NJ, USA

0 posted 2000-01-26 02:21 PM


Sometimes I feel threatened
and feel the urge to run,
from the coliding thoughts in my mind
from the raging fire in my heart.

But, alas, I too frequently allow
those thoughts to pummel me.
I touch the fire and get burned
only to throw my entire being in.

Sometimes I feel threatened
and feel the urge to run but,
moretimes I just stand here and endure
the reduction of my soul to ashes.


 I am an acquired taste, I'm anchovies. Not everyone likes those hairy little things.
Tori Amos

© Copyright 2000 Amy J. Renz - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-01-26 07:04 PM


Sincere feelings came across with this poem,
making it enjoyable to read.
Good work!
DH

armanca
Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
2 posted 2000-01-26 07:04 PM


Wow!  What a strong piece of work.  I can see myself in this one.  Great job.

Carman

poetry_kills
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
3 posted 2000-01-26 07:07 PM


amy: the last line "the reduction of my soul to ashes" -- incredible!! i love it... i know no other terms but to call it "poetic" or "masterful"... the poem as a whole is great, but i just cant get over that last line...   very good job...

sincerely,
jerome the boy with no soul

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

Amy J. Renz
Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 26
Newark, NJ, USA
4 posted 2000-01-26 07:53 PM


Thankyou all for the comments, it means alot to hear from people who know what I am feeling.  One question, Jerome, if you have no soul how can you tell me the last line is incredible?  If you had no soul, you would have no emotion, just wondering, and I was also wondering where you post, cause I can't find anything recently.  Thanks again.
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