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nirvana
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since 2000-01-24
Posts 9


0 posted 2000-01-26 10:01 AM


             A winner in the end
I have become everything
That I never intended
But the horrors of the child
Have all but ended
Fill the syringe
With yesterdays screams
Push the plunger
And destroy todays dreams
Which would be
The lesser pain?
To just live life
Or drug my veins?
I'll opt for the heroin
And take the cowards way
For death by injection
Is a small price to pay
Because in the end
When all's said and done
The game is over
And finally...I've won.

Nirvana

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JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
1 posted 2000-01-26 02:19 PM


I'm not sure if you mean you have won when you have died?  In any respect, this was an enjoyable poem.  I liked the way it flowed.
poetry_kills
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-01-26 07:21 PM


nirvana: i really like this one... very though-provoking and very sorrowful also... joy was right about the flow, it went smoothly, and the rhyme in this one is a little less awkward than that in some of your other poems... i enjoyed it a lot  

sincerely,
jerome the boy with no soul

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-01-26 08:33 PM


I too enjoyed this but will be closing the thread as drug usage and references are not for this forum.  Any problems or queries please email me.  We cannot condone drug usage when young ones may read this.

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


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