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summer
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since 1999-11-23
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long beach .ca.usa

0 posted 2000-01-25 01:17 PM





You continue to touch my heart
and parts of my soul I have
locked away for far too long.  
Why do you cry with me ? Our
tears are seducing your kiss is
healing. To touch you means more
than opening myself up to you.
You want all of me and I will
give that to you. How do you know
what is unspoken is it my eyes,
the tremble in my hands or did
you know before we met. I will
give myself only wanting a
promise back.A promise that all
you know wont haunt me anymore.
Can you turn my skeletons into
dancing life? With you I have
come to a road I never wanted to
cross but now I am here, please
dont leve me here alone standing
in myself to figure it all out
alone. I would rather just die.
But there is no turning back now
or trying to forget all over
again.

© Copyright 2000 summer - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
1 posted 2000-01-25 01:22 PM


This is beautiful Summer!  I know how it is to reach out again. . . sometimes, the magic can make miracles happen. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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2 posted 2000-01-25 07:02 PM


another beautiful touching poem, full of emotion. You express these feeling very well in this piece. I was moved by it. Janet Marie
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-01-25 07:12 PM


I'll go with Sven on this one, reach out, there are people who care and can offer understanding and comfort.  Some here in Passions!!  (HUGS) I know the feeling described in here so well, (HUGS) from one who cares and understands...

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2000-01-26 02:59 AM


Hi Summer this is a lovely poem.  When you said your kiss is healing it just really impacted me.  A woman I just met kissed me on the lips just once and I didn't ask for that kiss but I wanted that kiss and I remember thinking how healing the kiss was.  Also the way she responded to me while we were sitting together and talking and touching each other, and laughing together..it was all so wonderful and so healing.  James
Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
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Muncie, IN, USA
5 posted 2000-01-26 11:34 AM


"Can you turn my skeleton into dancing life?" I love this. And the form/lack of form is wonderfully used for a very real feeling.
fc
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since 2000-01-18
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6 posted 2000-01-26 12:55 PM


wow you spoke this very well....
Jesse Jaymz
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since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
7 posted 2000-01-26 04:08 PM


i liked this poem.  at one time in life we all come to this road.  alot of us get scared and dont wanna cross it.  but thoose who do know the consqunses.  alot of times it ends in heart break, but every once in a while it can be the greatest thing in the world.  well i have ramabled enough.  great poem and keep it up.  let your soul fly...

 True beauty is often hidden in darkness...
~Jesse C. Jaymz~

summer
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 80
long beach .ca.usa
8 posted 2000-01-27 12:51 PM


THANK YOU TO ALL OF YOU FOR THE CARING
RESPONSES !!! I LOVE YOU ALL AND THIS
FORUM..

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
9 posted 2000-01-27 09:47 PM


I agree with Jannel on the line "Can you turn my skeleton into dancing life"  That was my favorite line out of the whole piece.  Very descriptive.  


Joy

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