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fc
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since 2000-01-18
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0 posted 2000-01-25 11:14 AM


damaged goods

all the pain that your hands
ever created
all the scars that your tongue
ever seared
I buried, one piece of me at a time.
I forgot, but not forgave.
and now there is more of me forgotten
than is left to remember
and the unforgiving blackness
has eaten me
from the inside out



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summer
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since 1999-11-23
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long beach .ca.usa
1 posted 2000-01-25 12:56 PM


damaged goods--i have so many times myself felt the same way...
but remember damaged for only a moment. someone is out there waiting to restore you..God has a special way of preparing us for the one you were created for..   keep up the good work..

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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2 posted 2000-01-25 05:49 PM


this poem hits home for me as well, I have learned that being able to put these emotions down on paper is very theraputic and helps heal the scars...I hope you find the same in your writing. This is a deeply personal and beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing it. Janet Marie
Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
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Muncie, IN, USA
3 posted 2000-01-25 06:56 PM


pain is a way of saying "don't do that again," and scars are our way of remembering the pain. but focusing on the scars is self-destructive. forgiveness is so important, because hate is a selfish emotion that only hurts you in the end. you write feelings very well. i especially liked the searing tongue and unforgiving blackness as images.
Jannel

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
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Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-01-26 12:40 PM


Pain an ever circling crow from omen waiting to descend on you.  Felt this way myself.
Well done,good imagery.

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


fc
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 130

5 posted 2000-01-26 10:28 AM


thank you for your comments and in the future I will try to participate more in this forum, I have just been fighting my own personal war and have not been reaching out much...your comments mean much to me
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