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G. A. Webb
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

0 posted 2000-01-22 04:53 AM


TORMENT

I stand at the gates of Hell peering up to Heaven
Through the tears in my eyes I see only you
But the chains that bind me keep me imprisoned
And pull me back into the fiery abyss
With a scream from my soul I submit
Hoping that at least you heard my cry

G. A. Webb

© Copyright 2000 G. A. Webb - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-01-22 05:36 PM


So few words but so passion filled and moving. Bravo  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


poetry_kills
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since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-01-22 11:39 PM


g.a.: very powerful piece... i dont know if you meant it this way, but i interpret the poem in conjunction with the title as meaning that seperation from the one you love is equatable to being condemned in Hell... i can identify with this well... thank you for sharing this piece, it stirred my heart...

sincerely,
jerome the boy with no brain

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

baerlon
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA
3 posted 2000-01-23 12:01 PM


Great poem, it echos alot and can be taking any way.  Great job and keep them coming.


baerlon



 

Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
4 posted 2000-01-23 11:41 AM


Proving that many words are not necessary if you are using the right ones. Great work.
Jannel

G. A. Webb
Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA
5 posted 2000-01-24 01:44 PM


Thank you all very much for what you have said. I'm glad that you liked it.

Jerome...I had no idea how powerful this piece was until I had finished it and read it myself. I felt as though it said everything that I wanted it to say and to lengthen it by even one more word would have been futile. Your interpretation was correct...Thank you.

G

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