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ARCADIA
Junior Member
since 2000-01-12
Posts 23


0 posted 2000-01-20 10:57 PM


Disdain, Disdain..
      You...
My bitter tears
     I embark
Thy self to...
       You...
Silly little girl
      Your anguished crys
          Were hushed....
        By you...
And sick in heart...
Glee was encouraged..
False hope recognized...
         By you...
Now all is well
      Tonite lovers...Lust
And tonite sins.. perish
  Though only for a moment...
We will see..
    Love was intended...I wish to cry...
No..Hush little girl...
     This is the redemption of Man
  


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danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 2000-01-21 01:33 AM


i really liked this. it kind of set me back a step. i don't know how to explain it. kind of a quiet or subtle strength to it. anyway, very good!
Bojopy
Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

2 posted 2000-01-22 01:20 AM


Interesting!! I like the style too..  I also agree with danni It was subtle.

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


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