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brandywine
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since 2000-01-19
Posts 19
Illinois

0 posted 2000-01-20 06:28 PM


Darkness...then a sudden splash of light...
it lingers only for an instant..then ever so slowly fades away
I do not know what it is... I only know that has dared to invade my place of solitude...
Darkness...surrounds my every move...
inhale....exhale....darkness
Yet this unknown presence has my mind and soul mystified
I yearn for it to return... to let me learn of it
I call upon it.... and although I cannot see this mystery
I can feel its breathe upon my neck.... I can sence its
heart beat  disturbingly close to mine.....
Am I feeling at peace... have I changed any due to the boldness of this thing......

I am not comforted.... because when I glance around
I am still engulfed in darkness.....


© Copyright 2000 Brandy - All Rights Reserved
danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 2000-01-21 01:29 AM


i enjoyed this very much and can completely relate. nice work!
brandywine
Junior Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 19
Illinois
2 posted 2000-01-21 09:54 AM


Thanks Danni..... I am so glad I have found a place where I can express my feelings and emotions.... and people understand and do not look down on me for it.

Brandy

Bojopy
Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

3 posted 2000-01-22 02:48 AM


Look down upon you... never here I look up to people when they express themselves... I also can relate to this... I wish I did'nt but it does help me write.. and I see it helps you too.. good piece

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-01-23 01:03 PM


this is a beautiful, descriptive poem.
these kinds of emotions are the hardest to express, but you have done it with grace.
Janet Marie

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