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Isis
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0 posted 2000-01-19 06:08 PM


Alone I am
Full of confusion I am
Shrouded in darkness I am
A doubting Thomas I am.

Full of grief I am
Alone as always I am
Bereiving my heart I am
Fool with a clown's face I am.

Misfit I am
Enveloped in misery I am
Love starved I am
Nothing I am.


 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


© Copyright 2000 Isis - All Rights Reserved
Wendy Flora
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1 posted 2000-01-19 07:13 PM


I really like the form of this - because it could have been written with every line starting with "I am" instead of ending with it, and you chose deliberately not to conform.  Lovely!  (I have to admit, it took a couple of lines to get past the Yoda memories... but it's wonderful!!  ) -wen
Isis
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2 posted 2000-01-19 10:29 PM


Wendy, Help you I will yes!!  I love Yoda! Have a little figurine of him sitting on my computer right in front of me as I type.  He was one of the most intelligent beings in the universe.  I respect that!! LOL
Glad you liked it, just playing around and NOT conforming. LOL  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

3 posted 2000-01-20 12:02 PM


Your friend I am

I also like green eggs and ham


Your TOPS on my list Lisa

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2000-01-20 10:48 AM


I Wanta Be Dark
Feeling sorry for myself I am.  I know, I know more than anything you want to be Dark.  Anyway I'm not complaining just sharing my feelings.   Hey Lisa, I have some good news for you....Amore Mio...that means My love in Italian and you can find out all about the poem with that title "Amore Mio" in open poetry 5 (was page one when I wrote this) and the writer just happens to be darkangel and she even translates the Italian to the Australian language...and this is the good news...darkangel dwells in Sydney, Australia.   Might be real close to you but I don't know if you live in Sydney...James

merely_a_jester
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Arkansas... that's all you get
5 posted 2000-01-20 11:08 AM


wise are you in the ways of the poetry forum
seek not the way of rhyme schemes but instead embrace the oddness that is the little green shrively fellow who speaks as i do and strong in the ways of the free verse will you be
liked this idea i did
good job it was
sleepy i am
smell like a muppet i do
sound like grover as well
rambling i am

merely_a_jester

 Are scarecrows just like men, and do you hold
That a false coin is just as good as gold?

Moliere, "Tartuffe"

Sven
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6 posted 2000-01-24 01:16 PM


Something you are wonderful person. . . must look inside to see that which others see. . .

Light inside you burns like fire. . . loved you are. . . loved you always will be. . . by all. . . you'll see. . .

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
7 posted 2000-01-24 01:25 PM


to write as you do nothing you are far from.
love the poem

G. A. Webb
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA
8 posted 2000-01-24 01:34 PM


Isis,

I saw me in this and can relate to it completely. Very well done...Thank you.

G

Bojopy
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9 posted 2000-01-24 09:08 PM


Isis....hmmm intersting style here. I liked it!  "I am" good idea I might try it if thats ok?....... The last line 'Nothing I am'  you know could be read a different way too.  You could have meant that you were none of those things.....what do you think about that?

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


Isis
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Sunny Queensland
10 posted 2000-01-25 06:09 PM


Yoda and Isis thankyou all for your lovely and funny responses.  LOL as I read all this.
Thanks guys, the fun worked!!  
Bojopy you might be right but in Yoda talk who knows? HE HE HE LOL
Thanks one and all for responding.  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
11 posted 2000-01-25 06:44 PM


Lovely repetition. Says a lot. The last lines of each stanza are my favorites.
Jannel

Isis
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Sunny Queensland
12 posted 2000-01-25 07:28 PM


Sure Bojopy write a similar one, that is fine with me.  Thanks again everyone for your funny and kind responses to this LOL  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


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