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Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 2000-01-18 12:41 PM

Darkness hemming me in,
No light do I see,
This road I am journeying,
As as hazardous as can be.

I long for precious light,
A saviour to my soul,
A heartfelt kiss goodnight,
Not darkness in control.

I light a candle,
The darkness takes a step back,
Would someone tell me,
Is it I? Is there something I lack?

I gaze into the candle flame,
And journey within myself,
To happy memories of long ago,
That were hiding on the shelf.

The darkness fades,
The light it shines some more,
There is hope awaiting,
If only I can reach the door..

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2000-01-18 04:27 AM

Isis I Love this poem except for one part and I know this is dark passions so you probably got the title right but I would have titled this poem "Shine some more".
Just a thought. James

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

2 posted 2000-01-18 05:27 AM

Very nice Isis...as always. There is always a spark left...waiting to be a blaze within you...lighting up the sky in all of it's radiance. Just keep trying....you'll find your way...and the doors will be open to you. ((Hugglez))

"Enjoy the little things in life, for one day you may look back and realize they were the big things."
-Antonio Smith

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-01-18 02:57 PM

Great poem, Isis! Dark..with just the right touch of hope!!

Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

4 posted 2000-01-18 03:46 PM

Loved the scenery..look into a candle, let its light consume you...I am consumed by thousands of candles...I gaze into the suns of a thousand worlds. (stars, I mean)....

Nice, Isis.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

5 posted 2000-01-18 06:05 PM

Thanks Maharet huggles back at you

I like your title James but this is dark

Thanks Denise

Hawkwing I love your poetic voice, always have

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Majestic
Member

since 2000-01-11

Posts 264
houston, tx.

6 posted 2000-01-18 11:15 PM

My hand grasp the door
Slowly it opens wide
My heart skips a beat
For i've found love inside..

Hum...I think i'm in the wrong forum....to dark in here...My attitude is to "light" and cheery...(must be love)..lol...Must've made a wrong turn some where.

I loved the poem Isis....and the hope (as denise said) that you left in it...

Here's a nice cheery endin' for it...

What?...hehe ..I cant help it...Just trying to livin the place up abit..lol

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

7 posted 2000-01-18 11:54 PM

Now now, we are dark in here please. I usually add a cheery or hopeful ending, usually!!

I know what you mean though.

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

8 posted 2000-01-20 12:17 PM

I light a candle,
The darkness takes a step back

I'm sending you out a box of candles for those particularly Dark Nights.

The next time you gaze into the candle flame
and journey within yourself. Let it be visions of happiness in the future you see.

danni
Senior Member

since 1999-11-20

Posts 688
wisconsin

9 posted 2000-01-21 02:38 AM

i can relate all too well. i am happy to say that at this moment i have a little light in my life, not that of a candle though. *smile*
very nice piece.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

10 posted 2000-01-21 05:50 PM

Thanks FreeByrd I love candles

Thanks Danni

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Bojopy
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 391

11 posted 2000-01-22 03:17 AM

I know where that door is Isis!! Its within and that is the only way out... At least that is where mine is and I have just began to find it!!!! Where do you think your door is?

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)

G. A. Webb
Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

12 posted 2000-01-22 03:39 AM

Very interesting Isis. I could see what you were writing, and I like that. Thank you.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

13 posted 2000-01-24 01:11 PM

The flame is within you my friend. . . let it shine for all to see. . .

I can see it. . . never was there such a light. . . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

14 posted 2000-01-24 03:03 PM

Poetry at its best
Glad you posted it
know a friend looking for something like this to fit her life.

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