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Test of the Immortal

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Poet deVine
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0 posted 01-17-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine

I have posted only a few poems here in the Dark... and feel the pull back here....

Elysium’s daughter sought to gain
Her womanhood in this test
Alone to brave the forest wild
Affirming her as one of the best

Immortal clan of women, cursed
To procreate with mankind
Bound together in passion
Love and hate intertwined

Emboldened by the hunger
She crept closer to the glow
Firelight dancing in the forest
Visions she yearned to know

Smells now reached her nostrils
Combined scent of man and fear
But food was the temptation
That brought her ever near

Creeping silently until
She stood behind a tree
Seeing for the first time
The men of villainy

Her father sat amongst them
Broadsword at his side
Drunk from mugs of whiskey
Meaty hands gesturing wide

“We’ll find the creature, guaranteed
or my head will surely roll
find her ‘fore she breeds again
she’ll lie with man or troll

They talked of her for hours
The hunt was quite in hand
But they did not reckon for
Her knowledge of the land

Soon stentorian snores
Echoed round the fire
She crept closer seeking
Food to quench her desire

Quickly now she moved about
Stealing weapons from their packs
And tossed them in the river
To delay their vengeful attacks

Lifting up a sack of food,
She stood finally her full height
Then boldly walked away
Into the cimmerian night

She hid her cache of food
Then returned to see them awaken
Smiling as the wondered how they
Allowed themselves to be taken

One by one they awoke
Snorting and with manly ease
Til one after another found
She could take whatever she pleased

“Damn that immortal!”
cried her father with dismay,
“I rue the day I bed the mother
Now tis time for whelp to pay!”

She lingered there no longer
Having seen her father’s shame
Slipping into the forest shelter
Tired of this childish game

Immortal tho she may be born
denial smote her tender soul
so tainted did she feel
she regretted the food she stole

But her clan had demanded
She seek purity in this trial
They sent her naked into the woods
To forage for awhile

She survived upon her wits
Living as creatures of the wild
Gaining strength to carry on
As woman, no longer child.

Thirty days of isolation
Then to the caves she returned
Body shaped by hard living
Bearing scars that she had earned

She greeted her sweet mother
Who could read her mind with ease
Together they accepted that
They lived for themselves to please

The welcoming fire died quietly
And she rose to proclaim her right
“From this day forth, this Immortal
shall be called Elysium’s Night

© Copyright 2000 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
Posts 9561
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1 posted 01-18-2000 12:22 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Most excellent Devine! What a tale you weave!
Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska


2 posted 01-18-2000 12:24 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I can't quite find the words to describe how I feel, but it was very interesting and I liked the read!!  Well Done!!!!! I think you should post in Dark more often!!

Take Care
Bridgette
JennyLee
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since 09-01-99
Posts 1478
Northwestern, NJ.


3 posted 01-18-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

This was an absolutely delightful read...I loved how the last stanza pulled it altogether.....Beautiful Poet devine


Jenny Lee


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

Denise
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4 posted 01-18-2000 02:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! What a tale! This is excellent, Sharon! I'm glad I found it!!

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~

Isis
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since 09-06-99
Posts 6390
Sunny Queensland


5 posted 01-18-2000 07:06 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Sharon, glad you are drawn here, for this had me enraptured from beginning to end.
Wonderful work!!  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Michael
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since 08-13-99
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6 posted 01-19-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Exceptional piece here, Lady DeVine.  What a tale.  So glad you joined us in Dark, I do hope you will continue to more often.


Michael
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7 posted 01-19-2000 12:43 AM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

What a story and it flowed like water under the bridge.  I enjoyed this and you must submit more here!

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


8 posted 01-19-2000 02:09 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Sharon, no matter where you travel, you and your work is a diamond in the rough!
The darkness pulls you because of the balance needed for caring side you usually portray!
Poet deVine
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9 posted 01-19-2000 07:21 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you all for you kindness... the prequels to this poem were posted under my alias "Elysium Moon"...they are around somewhere!  I'm so pleased you liked this.. I am working my way around the forums..dropping bits here and there..I will leave the Critical Forum til last though so when they tell me I have no talent, I will have a few more poems written before then..  
bsquirrel
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10 posted 05-23-2002 02:22 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Ooo! Damned and divine, deVine. *bows*

She said burn ... together.
-TON

KuruShio
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11 posted 11-23-2003 01:44 PM       View Profile for KuruShio   Email KuruShio   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for KuruShio

Wow how anything this good can remain unpublished I cannot fathom.  I loved the immagery and the way it blended together.

To long has this thread been dead awaken and bare new posts

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.  
KuruShio  (DeadlyBob)

 
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