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dreemr
Junior Member

since 2000-01-10

Posts 34
Covington, LA, USA

0 posted 2000-01-14 11:56 PM

I sit beneath a mighty oak,
And gaze up at its limbs,
A wooden web of wonder,
That took centuries to spin.

They sway so softly to and fro,
Aloft a quiet breeze,
The only sound a throaty thrush
And rustling rusty leaves.

Cotton clouds drift lazily,
Across a sea of blue,
As sunlight dances daintily,
On silver drops of dew.

As Autumn in sarcastic splendor,
Taunts impending Winter gloom,
So savor I these shards of light,
As soon the darkness shall resume.

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Not sure how this will be taken here. I wrote the first three stanzas several years ago and have never been able to finish it. As is probably obvious, the poem was going in a positive direction. I could not find it in my heart to wrap it up that way though. Life (at least mine) just doesn't work that way.

Sanity is the playground of the unimaginative.

Thaddeus
Member

since 1999-11-16

Posts 78
MA

1 posted 2000-01-15 12:36 PM

I love your title & how the phrase completes your poem. "Shards of light" has just the right amount of foreboding, as if sitting there Winter will sneak up instantly and create and drop deadly gleaming icicles upon your pondering head (aw, I don't mean to be too melodramatic, but you got this poem right on the money!).

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

2 posted 2000-01-15 12:53 PM

Beautiful thoughts and imagery

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Bojopy
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 391

3 posted 2000-01-15 01:34 AM

You can tell the difference from the first 3 verses to the last. Life does work that way (at least mine). It all seems to be just fine and then a new season (donwfall) occurs. But as humanity grows we learn to deal with these and better ourselves. Like they say "what doesnt kill you, only makes you stronger". A nice piece here....Bojopy
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"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)

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