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Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 2000-01-14 10:34 AM


I give you my arms
to lift you high

I give my eyes
And guide your way

I give you my soul
To steer you true

And i give you my heart
for i forever love you

All this i give to you
Yet it does not compare
To your love so true
Or to your belief
In the nights fullmoon
and the wonders it can do


 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

© Copyright 2000 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
1 posted 2000-01-20 06:03 AM


I liked the first part of the poem, but the last stanza didn't fit into the rest of the flow for me.
The rest could flow well without the last stanza.


 Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder.

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