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dreemr
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 34
Covington, LA, USA

0 posted 2000-01-13 07:29 PM


Faceless names, a sea of souls,
There I swim without direction.
Empty hearts so full of holes,
Searching blindly for affection.

Distantly I hear you calling,
Crying out for hope like me.
Reaching out, yet helpless, falling,
Into darkness desperately.

I turn to run towards the voice.
Instinctively I seek its source,
For in its quiet beckoning,
It draws me like some cosmic force.

Then rising from the mist I see,
A beacon in this darkest night.
Your smiling eyes shine back at me,
Your heart becomes my guiding light.

Darkness gone, now peace abounds,
Eyes now open wide I see.
My search is over, life is found.
At last, the End of Destiny.



 Sanity is the playground of the unimaginative.

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Shirleeah Storey
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 68
Delaware
1 posted 2000-01-13 08:13 PM


This is a lovely piece. I'm still wiping the tears from my eyes. We all wish to find that one that will end our search for love. Thanks for sharing this.
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-01-13 11:26 PM


I loved this, so moving and beautiful, but I do question in the end, it is not an end to destiny but only the beginning...  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 2000-01-14 01:12 PM


Poignant piece. Destiny is a fickle mistress
though....


Jenny


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist


Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

4 posted 2000-01-14 07:26 PM


dreemr this was superb!! I enjoyed this much "End of Destiny" woooo great verse!!!
Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

5 posted 2000-01-14 07:26 PM


dreemr this was superb!! I enjoyed this much "End of Destiny" woooo great verse!!!

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)



Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
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6 posted 2000-01-14 11:36 PM


Great piece, dreemr.  I flailed in that Darkness many moons myself.  I can truly appreciate the beauty in finally finding smiling eyes upon you.  Beautifully done.

Michael

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 2000-01-15 12:55 PM


Dreemr don't take my earlier response the wrong way.  An end to that destiny but still the beginning of another, know what I mean?
This was superb, out of darkness into light.

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



dreemr
Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 34
Covington, LA, USA
8 posted 2000-01-15 01:08 AM


Isis, I knew what u meant and I didn't take it the wrong way And as futile as it is to fight this, it is still frustrating not to have control, to know that our plights are in the hands of that "fickle mistress"  
So when at last she allows us a conclusion to our quest, I'd rather bask in the light of victory for a while before I set out on the next. Or better yet, forgo the rest and not tempt her whimsy any further.

nicnac8
Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46
New York, N.Y. USA
9 posted 2000-01-15 01:38 AM


Great poem. I knew from the beginning "faceless names..." that I would like this poem.The imagery and personifications made this poem really beautiful.
Keep up the good work.

~nicnac8

DayDreamer
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since 2000-01-16
Posts 30

10 posted 2000-01-16 06:26 PM


Beautiful poem, Dreemr.  Even from the first words I knew that it was going to be a good. ~DayDreamer
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