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ARCADIA
Junior Member
since 2000-01-12
Posts 23


0 posted 2000-01-12 08:49 PM


BABY SAID TO NEVER TOUCH...
FOR THE TOUCH WOULD SURELY BURN
MY HAND WAS A FLAME...
HE SCREAMED "YOU'LL NEVER LEARN"
HE SWORE WE'D BE MASTERS
HE GRABBED ME BY THE HAND
NOW IT WAS TIME...
TO RULE GEHENNA'S LAND
I STOOD WITH A GHOST...
THE WORLD IT WAS DYING...
I TURNED AROUND FOR COMFORT
BUT GOD HIMSELF WAS CRYING
A SPECIES NOW IN STANDSTILL
OF WHAT FEAR WAS LEFT TO COME
A MESSAGE MESSAGE LEFT UNSPOKEN...
A MISSION LEFT UNDONE
MY MIND SENSING LOSS
SADNESS TRACED WITH FURY
THE RESULTS OF A MAN
OUR ACTIONS NOW OUR JURY
WHAT TO BE DONE?
WHAT WORDS TO SAY?
A BRIO BROKE BY IMAGE
SUCH A PRICE TO PAY
A FALLACY IN HEAVEN
LUCIDITY IN FIRE
TO RATIONALIZE THE NOW
RESTRICTION ON DESIRE
I FALL TO MY KNEES
MY SOUL ABOUT TO BREAK
THE NEEDING OF ANOTHER
HOW MUCH OF THIS TO TAKE
AN ANGEL GAVE ME HOPE
WHILE WATCHING FROM ABOVE
TRUE ESCAPE OF DESPAIR
IS ONLY THROUGH TRUE LOVE
GOOD AND EVIL NOW WERE MIXED
THE FIRE NOW BURNED STRONGER
WHO REALLY KNEW..
IT ISN'T FOR MUCH LONGER

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Bojopy
Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

1 posted 2000-01-12 08:59 PM


Welcome to passions ARCADIA!!!!  What a great first piece to give. I liked the line 'BUT GOD HIMSELF WAS CRYING' !!! and 'GOOD AND EVIL NOW WERE MIXED' !!!! Once again welcome to our family........Bojopy

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


Local Rebel
Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
2 posted 2000-01-12 09:05 PM


I agree, an excellent first posting.  

um

however... could you turn off the caps?  it's a bitch to read like that

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-01-12 10:19 PM


Welcome to our Passions family, and I third it, what an excellent first posting!!  Bravo and welcome  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
4 posted 2000-01-13 11:04 PM


Indeed a wonderful first post. And I look forward to more. I also welcome you!  
Walter Poe
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

5 posted 2000-01-14 10:39 AM


"The world and i we hold your hand
And all around in words so grand
The angels sing to heavens tune
Come oh pure, We welcome you."

To many more great poems

Welcome from walter

 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

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