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Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 2000-01-12 11:04 AM


Midnight moon
Beautiful blue
Lights the sky
Fills my room

Softly it falls
Amid dreams call
Sleepless heart
Remembers your all

Hearts callous glove
tears at my love
Leaving me shattered
Leaveing me sore

Days lights
invadeing my nights
still without sleep
revealing my plight

Heat burns
as the sun turns
Winding its way
through its days lights

I see the night
approaching in slight
I see my breath
in the air so fresh

Finaly i sleep
Finaly i dream
You are here again
Your death is unreal

I know i will wake
I do not want
The bitter day to break
So i hold you tight
   and relish this last night



 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

© Copyright 2000 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
haze
Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA
1 posted 2000-01-12 11:22 AM


there is a powerful and drawing play here (very well done with in the iambic) drew me through well! Excellent work Poe-Poet!
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-01-12 05:33 PM


Powerful and alluring I would say.  As always Walter a triumph.  I was SO surprised to hear you were 18 in my head you were around 30!!!  That is a positive comment ok?

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



Bojopy
Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

3 posted 2000-01-12 10:23 PM


18 oh my gosh you words seem to reveal age.  I see a long and prosperous future in the writing you will share.  Keep them coming!!  Wonderful poem here!

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


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