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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA 
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BEAUTIFUL I don't want to be beautiful (right now) I want to reach into passion's throat Aztec Determination Sucking hearts' Twisted Soul Wringing wet flames over bitter Champagne cocktails served up hot In Cristal Darque (I don't want to be) Beautiful I want you to feel the rim Glass rubbing raw pink fingers RED |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ouch... Well, I won't force it upon you...LOL Let me just pour you another and step back cautiously. Welcome to Dark Passions, Haze. Great piece here. |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Hi Michael...Thank you for the welcome. I am traditionally, I suppose, a beat poet (so most of my stuff goes into Adult) just cause I tend to Irreverence. Darque is not my usual genre, but I spun this off as a reply, seemed to fit here (and I was pretty pleased with it) *S* SO I thank you twice...TA ~haze |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
And she stabs again. Have I told you you're beautiful when you're black Oh-2? |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Welcome to the dark side of things haze! I enjoyed this piece in many ways. Please stick around and join our family. You have a talent I do not think I've seen in here yet.............Bojopy "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
LR...Your praise fondles me to fascination...Thank you. Bojopy...thank you twice...as I told Michel, Darque is not my usual drink But I will try. I have also been known to be pretty poignant with the old slice-n-dice. I will be sure to keep it wrapped...Thanks again Til Again...~haze |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
haze why dont you introduce yourself to the dark passions in a post by the chainedangel "Family in dark passions". It was an idea I wish was thought of before and I think we all enjoy. And again welcome!!! "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
The dark can be a wonderful relief, to pour out angers or fears etc. Welcome Haze, and I hope you decide to stay for a while, or visit regularly  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Liked the right now feelings and getting it down. Most of my stuff is a bit out there and that's just the way I like it. Looking forward to more from you. There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief - Hendrix |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Isis & FreeByrd...Thank you for the warm welcome...I'm always around... We will see what the darque can do...Til Again...~haze |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
hi haze, i enjoyed the way you took the word beautiful and used it to please yourself. Actually I don't understand the poem but I like presentation. James |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
jmlee-thank you. The poem is not about visual perception. Its alleghory. What I am really saying is "I don't want to write words that please you-I want you to feel the depth & soul like glass shards in prissy feet-I want you to feel the edges/reality without romance.) Do any of us ever (really) understand exactly what the poet was thinking? Unless its all tangible imagery, we can't. As far as I am concerned-If I made you feel (anything) Even anger-I have done well. Thank you for the read. Til Again...~haze |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Great point haze!!! The reader and the poet don't always have the same thoughts on a piece. Just like in music many of the lyrics are for themselves. We just try and relate to it in our own way!! "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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