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Bojopy
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0 posted 2000-01-11 03:58 AM




Images in the eyes so alluding
and so brittle
            with monstrous spirits and suprise
So many moments reflected
to memory within them
            and all they can subdue

Friction upon the lids
bring flashes of great light
            and irritation at length
But closed in a sleepin dream
of 'REM' of nightmare
            they visualize whats not new

So tell us uncleansed eyes
what reality are you in
            and what shadows do you see
How many floaters will afloat
with these lookers that rain
            upon the saddened cue

Will the great light appear
in the image of a dream
            or within daylight
Will the eyes go beyond
while taking its thoughts
            Imagined as true

Who's to say
the answers of the I
NOT EYE
            

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
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1 posted 2000-01-11 06:04 AM


Too late at night for me to deeply ponder this, you are smart my friend!!  
Michael
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since 1999-08-13
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2 posted 2000-01-11 08:07 AM


I often ponder the perception of the eyes in dream...almost as if they are a link to another dimension.   Your last two stanzas really slam it home.  Good job.

Michael

Bojopy
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3 posted 2000-01-11 04:11 PM


I'm sorry If I always seem to be deep.  Not all my stuff is like it but they seem to be going that way.  Michael thanks for your response.  I think alot of the unknown may lye in dreams or the subcontious.  Thanks again

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


haze
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA
4 posted 2000-01-11 04:19 PM


Bojopy, you have a powerful pen. Very well done...the subconscious divined in dreams-deveined...FABULOUS DEPTH...EXTREME KUDOS!
Bojopy
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5 posted 2000-01-11 04:31 PM


Thank you haze.  I'm a little different in the ways of what I think about.  "I can't say why, as for I know.  It began so slowely but now its a grow".  Anyway if you want to hear how strange I am read my first post A New God.  Thanks again................Bojopy

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
6 posted 2000-01-12 02:00 AM


Bo- Don't apologize for being deep. My mind loves a good challenge. And you certainly come up with some tough ones. As far as dreaming goes, I wouldn't know much about it. I have not dreamt much in the last four years. I don't know why. Once upon a time I used to dream quite often, sacrificing alot of sleep. At any rate, I liked this one too. A great perspective on dreams.
Bojopy
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7 posted 2000-01-12 11:28 PM


I don't sleep well either.  But when I do I dream such weird things.  Once I dreamt about eating a bag of chips that never ended! Anyone know what that may mean?

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


dreemr
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 34
Covington, LA, USA
8 posted 2000-01-13 12:47 PM


Bojopy...really liked the poem. I have some comments on dreams (go figure   ) seems appropriate here. I think that if we could only master control of them, it would be like
having the ultimate power to do whatever we want (if only in our minds). But as it is our minds that perceive all of the sensations associated with the things we do anyway, then i think it'd be almost as good as actually doing them. Kinda like natural virtual reality. Anyway...again, loved the poem.

Bojopy
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9 posted 2000-01-24 03:40 AM


Dreemr I have to agree with you on controliing our dreams.  When I was in high school I was playing around with that idea and found I could do it(not all the time).  But after high school I seemed to lose that ability and I have a theory on that:  If we have control of our lives outside of dreams that in some way we will have more control of dreams.  And back then I was in complete control (at least in my mind I was).  Just a theory and I think I am going to try and do this again now that I thought about it.  Lets all give that a try and write about if we can!!!  Now that is a challenge....LOL

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


kitkat
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since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
10 posted 2000-01-24 12:28 PM


I like the lines-will the great light appear in the imagine of a dream or within daylight.
Your endless bag of chips? Now that's a munchie attack dream!!  
I find I too can sometime control my dreams.
The mind is a mysterious place  "!

 You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel. Carol King

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