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Death Becomes Her

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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 01-09-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

When the frosty air
ripples over her bare body,
it burns the jagged wounds
that were pierced deeply into her back,
While she stood still,
preying that the moment would be done with
But this was now,
and the blisters of her being hadn't healed yet

She moved just a little,
realizing that she had once again awaken,
and as she reaches for a blanket,
she realizes that there is none
And she sits up to look around,
the room looks just as it did before -
Deep in it's shadow,
blue in it's flooding nature...
Windows covered by shades and cloth,
and her fears of vulnerability
Everything motionless, cold, and empty
Empty
She closes her eyes tightly,
wishing it all away
but knowing that she will never wake up
from this eternal nightmare

Crying and crippled she had been,
torn of her every innocence,
and born into a being that was alien
to both light and shadow,
That was alien to herself
and the people that were supposed to know her
Sitting on the edge of the bed,
she feels the tears building inside her,
she hears the screaming,
the raging,
the pleading,"Help me!!! God please help me!!!",
but nobody hears screaming here
She wishes more than anything she could cry,
it's hurts more only to be able to feel it...
it's torchure,
a torchure she can hardly bare
The cold, frigid girl crying inside her,
cries so hard,
her head is pouding,
her throat is sore,
she can't see,
she can't breath,
and she can't be
She watches as the girl stumbles and falls,
she watches as she doesn't move
and she tries to force the tears out of her,
because she's desperate for a release,
but to no avail

Staring at the ground,
she lifts up her head,
so that she can see her mirror
Her reflection looking as though
it melts into the shadow and blue,
that have for an eternity surrounded her,
and through this she sees,
that death has become her
She sighs a deep, painful sigh
and pulls herself together,
she tells the girl to dry her tears,
because crying won't make her feel better
at this point,
She looks into the mirror,
into her deep brown eyes
that are alined with yellow and green
Eyes that are the only window to her soul,
which could be the only thing to show herself,
so many times she feared their betrayal
But now she was telling them,
telling herself,
that whatever the tragedy that washes upon her,
whatever demon lurks in her shadow,
whatever injustice crosses her path,
she will deal with it,
alone, just as she always had,
because that is the way it is
and she above all should know that by now,
and she promised herself
that she would smile, and laugh, and sing
and praise the beauty of her life
for all that it is worth
And it is worth so very much

She stands up slowly and walks out of her room,
hearing the voices of her family,
seeing the faces of her brother's friends,
and she closes the door behind her,
keeping the key hidden deep inside her pocket

~~Thanks if you read the whole thing...I know it's very long but I had so much to say. I wrote this just now online so I don't know how good it'll be. I've only done that dwice before...call me the keeper of tradition but I always did like paper and journals and such...Well I'm off elsewhere...been asleep for hours and I've got so much work to do..the joys of life, right? Hell yeah. =) Thanks everybody.~~~




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Isis
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1 posted 01-09-2000 06:05 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Wonderful Dark Enchantress, nothing wrong with it at all.  Such depth of feeling I can relate so easily. Bravo  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 01-09-2000 06:09 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Thank you very much Isis...I'm just glad I didn't bore you. Btw - Did you get my email...I wasn't sure if you had because my email wasn't working too well yesterday.

 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~
Isis
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3 posted 01-09-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

No I didn't get your email, send me another to tell me how your friend is going.
And this poem was great, not to long or boring for me at least, and as I said there is depth in you my friend  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Dark Enchantress
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4 posted 01-09-2000 06:30 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

All too deep for one young mind. But that's typical, right? I'll send you an email when I get a chance but right now I'm swamped with work to be completed by tomorrow. Ugh...don't you wish weekends were one day longer? That would make so much of a difference. But, back in reality now and I don't have much time. Thank you for listening.


 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~
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5 posted 01-09-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

I like everything about this in every way....with how you just wrote it online and what it portrayed....I read that if you ever have writers block that you should do a thing called filibustering.....which is just write without worrying what you write...I don't think you need it but I just wanted to tell you. Anyway wonderful work here!!!!

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


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6 posted 01-09-2000 11:43 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Thank you very much bojopy...and I'll try that sometime if I'm having a writer's block.
(I'd be lying if I said it wasn't a problem every now and then.)   I was just trying to symbolize myself...although some of it needs no symbolization. Like not being able to cry outloud...I've hidden things for so long that I've almost forgotten how to release it..and how to trust...but that's a whole nother story. I think I'll save you all the trouble and simply say, thank you and goodnight.


 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~


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JennyLee
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7 posted 01-10-2000 09:09 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Nay,not boring at all!
I found it insightful and a good read  


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

Dark Enchantress
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8 posted 01-10-2000 02:56 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Thank you very much Jenny. I just thought it would be boring because of how long it is...I know that sometimes that can be a turn-off. But if you think it's good then I won't argue.  

 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~
Bojopy
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9 posted 01-10-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

I have a problem with expressing feelings when it a sad feeling.  But I found writing to be a great release and boy o boy this is a great place for it!!!!!! Thanks again to the creators of this site!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

BOJOPY

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


Dark Enchantress
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10 posted 01-10-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

I fully agree with you Bojopy! I don't know what I'd do without this site. My poems would feel so empty because no one else except for Passions read my work. A special thanks to everyone!

~*Dark Enchantress*~


 "Enjoy the little things in life, for one day you may look back and realize they were the big things."
-Antonio Smith

Michael
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11 posted 01-11-2000 07:23 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

D.E., I think this is one of the best pieces I've seen from you.  I relate so well to it, especially the last stanza, closing the door and keeping the key hidden deep in my pocket...great work.

Michael
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12 posted 01-11-2000 03:14 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Thank you Michael. I really do like hearing from you. My feelings are go deeper than my vocabulary so I didn't think that it would be too interesting considering I couldn't really describe it that well. It all just came pouring out one day so...had to type it up. Well, thank you for replying and dealing with my ramblings.  

Maharet


 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~


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Bojopy
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13 posted 01-11-2000 03:58 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

I just have a question!  Have you ever been writing and came up with a word that you did not even know?  I have done this alot lately.  When I look it up I just can't believe it actually fits with what I was writing!!! Very weird.  If anyone reads this reply comment on this if you wish!!
Bojopy

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)

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14 posted 01-12-2000 09:28 AM       View Profile for FreeByrd   Email FreeByrd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit FreeByrd's Home Page   View IP for FreeByrd

Wonderful piece of work.

Long ? I don't think so. It was over and I didn't want it to be. I wanted to turn the page and read more.

 There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix


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She stands up slowly and walks out of her room,
hearing the voices of her family,
seeing the faces of her brother's friends,
and she closes the door behind her,
keeping the key hidden deep inside her pocket

I loved the ending, my dear. What an ending... I loved how you brought, yet again, the story from it's virgin state through all the pain and torment to the end, which in reality is a fresh beginning. I personally loved the length. It had depth that way. I don't mean depth by length, but that length allowed you to show us the picture in every way possible to you. It really helped us have a glance into you soul. Just know now, you will never be alone.

It's rather amazing the detail and clarity you get with your poetry. Rarely do I get what I am trying to say out so well. Another thing I notced was the short beginning and endings... it brought it back around again, so that ending it wouldn't be a shock. Superb, dear.

~ Titus

"My body is merely the canvas of my soul."
         ~ The Night Owl

 
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