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Quiet Lightning
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since 1999-12-26
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0 posted 2000-01-09 12:49 PM



       Blood and water
blood it thicker than water
water is thinner than blood
anyway you look at it
they both can start a flood
blood runs like the river
it never stops flowin
at any given time
you can bleed without knowing
blood gets past around
to people who are in need
without enough water and blood
you suffer like the trees
steady wondering how
these to are important liquids can make
person to person realize how much you need to take



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danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 2000-01-09 12:54 PM


The wording in the second to last line threw me off a bit. But overall, a good poem with an interesting perspective.
Lil OnE
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since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
2 posted 2000-01-10 02:46 PM


Either way you look at it, they both can start a flood...
I really liked that line. How very true. This was a really good piece... great job!!


 I merely say what's in my heart
and you call it a style.
Don't put it in a cage, don't
mistreat it. You say you're
hungry for knowledge... Here it
is... EAT IT!! -DMX

~Lil OnE~



Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
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3 posted 2000-01-10 03:42 PM


Good poem here...both blood and water are true elements of life. Without either one our bodies would be useless. With the flow of these beautiful liquids...I am reminded of how precious and delicate life really is.
Lets remember though that a drop of blood may bring a tear but a tear should never bring a drop of blood. (or more)


 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~

Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
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4 posted 2000-01-10 07:43 PM


I agree with Lil One about that line.  How thought provoking.


 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)



Michael
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5 posted 2000-01-11 07:20 AM


Well, you certainly need a little of both to live....but then too much of either can be devistating.....good poem.

Michael

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