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ChainedAngel
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since 2000-01-07
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0 posted 2000-01-07 05:49 PM


Just sit straight
I don't even care if you listen
Just act like you care
And that everything really matters

We're so insignificant
A speck upon a speck
Inside this glass ball
Shake it up and watch our lives fall

So why do you want it?
It's not so great of a thing
So what happens when that ball breaks?
Will it change or all be the same?

Brag to your own
Where are you
When you loose your sense of direction
Who to hold onto?
When you hold enemies closer then friends

Oh my god we have a break through
Return to the lost and found
Cause your soul is lost
But your mind is found

The sick are the sane
So what about you?
So much sicker then the rest!
you see it all?

Try our hardest to fit in
Where do you go
When you don't fit in
Guess to the lost and found



 There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead

- B. Warner

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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
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1 posted 2000-01-07 06:06 PM


Whew!!  This could go so many ways..  I really liked it.  At first I thought you were condeming someone else, then you turned it on yourself too!  Kept me guessing  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-01-07 06:08 PM


Whew!!  This could go so many ways..  I really liked it.  At first I thought you were condeming someone else, then you turned it on yourself too!  Kept me guessing  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-01-07 06:08 PM


Whew!!  This could go so many ways..  I really liked it.  At first I thought you were condeming someone else, then you turned it on yourself too!  Kept me guessing  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-01-07 06:08 PM


Whew!!  This could go so many ways..  I really liked it.  At first I thought you were condeming someone else, then you turned it on yourself too!  Kept me guessing  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
5 posted 2000-01-08 12:40 PM


Great job ChainedAngel...related to this one very well. But remember...we weave our own chains and we have the power to break them. The question is, do you really want to?

 "They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
6 posted 2000-01-08 08:12 AM


Wow, such powerful emotions,and so beautifully written.
Verse Two states the state of humanity so well !!!!!


Jenny


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist


Quiet Lightning
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 56

7 posted 2000-01-08 10:03 AM


You expressed yourself very well in this poem.Hope to read another one from you
Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

8 posted 2000-01-09 10:48 PM


WOW!!!!!!!!!!! This hits you like a ton of bricks and keeps you wondering and wondering and wondering????? I like the metaphors within this piece a great deal.......

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)



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