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ChainedAngel Member
since 2000-01-07
Posts 55tx |
Snap & Break The pain It builds up The rage It shows up But no one seems to notice How much longer can I hold this? My head It pounds My thoughts They're drowned They are all clueless How much longer can I do this? There's only so much one man can take Before he just snaps & breaks So where am I at on this little scale? It hurts In my mind I strain All the time Can I push a little harder? Or am I nearing the border? I clinge To the past It's so hard To make it last I fell down a long time ago And with it went my ego There's only so much one man can take Before he just snaps & breaks So where am I on this little scale? She lied To me before I try To better a whore Nothing seems to work I only make it worse I snapped Before the time I broke No crime For some reason the fingers always pointed at me Did I miss something that you see? There's only so much one man can take Before he just snaps & breaks [This message has been edited by ChainedAngel (edited 01-07-2000).] |
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ChainedAngel Member
since 2000-01-07
Posts 55tx |
This is the first time one of my poems has been released to the public. The reason why I wrote this poem is because since the age of 12 I have not been able to talk due to a freak accident involving something I don't like to talk about. Since then the only way I have been able to express myself has been through writing something down and using my hands. I wrote this poem during an English class when I just moved to a new school and had no way of communicating with anyone. My only true friend throughout the entire 4 years of high school was my english teacher, because she was the only one who understood the power of poetry.< !signature--> There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead - B. Warner [This message has been edited by ChainedAngel (edited 01-07-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Excellent poem, Chained Angel. Welcome to Dark Passions. I tell you, I've snapped in the eyes of Abuse before...there truly is only so much a man can take. I know what it's like to have all the finger pointed at you too...you're not alone, let me reassure you. Good job. Michael |
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Shirleeah Storey Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 68Delaware |
ChainedAngel I welcome you to the passions family. I'm new as well but I can honestly tell you, you will feel right at home here and everyone is great!!!!! I too know what it's like to snap from being abuse. Shutdown and only be able to write to express myself. Time does heal, and with your writings the time will pass quickly. So continue to write and post. I love this poem. Can't wait to read more. |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
This poem is excellent. So sad and angry, and expressed so well. I am glad you have deciced to post your poems here. I look forward to reading more. Welcome! |
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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
Welcome to this wonderful family, here is hwere you will find people who truly understand how you feel, and be very supportive of you. Your poem was excellent and I am looking forward to reading more of your writings. Stay strong my friend we are all with you and we all understand. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Welcome to the family!!! This piece I can relate to "how much can one man take" I loved that along with the title snaps and breaks. Welcome again and I hope to see more. "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome indeed to the Dark Forum. Honey hear, we listen, we read, and we care. You can express yourself all you want!! I really liked this and it's wonderful for one so young at the time. Awaiting more  At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato) ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Thaddeus Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 78MA |
Thank you for sharing this. "Snap"ping is a theme that I've explored in my poetry. Though I do not have the same experience to match yours, understanding pain and pressure is a very universal topic you have captured artistically and effectively. Welcome to the forum and I look forward to enjoying and pondering your work. |
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ChainedAngel Member
since 2000-01-07
Posts 55tx |
Wasn't expecting so many replies soo soon. Thanks guys/girls for the support. I'll try to post up some more of my poems in the near future. There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead - B. Warner |
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Quiet Lightning Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 56 |
I liked the way how you stated the noun and tell how you felt about it |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Greetings ChainedAngel, I am new to here as of this day. I have read a few of the posts here and find that all are grand....this though....this....is absolutally wonderous!! I have been penning poetry for aprox. 15 years now...words that most others do not pen or do not appriciate, but ones words are sometimes all one has. I have lived true to this. The depths of ones soul is where the true person lives...not the one that most put forthe to others. The depths are what I seek. I comend you on your sincerity and wonderful expression. I do not see that often ...I do not often see the darker side of any...the pain, longing, dispair, the true emotions. Here I have found much of that and I find that amazing. I have aprox. 13 poems now published and three more awaiting my signature to be published in a book of the milliniums best...all penned from the darker side of emotions....... I can not wait to read more of your words.....my best of wishes in your words.... a-alibaster There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
ChainedAngel... this was definatly a piece that I, as others, are very glad you posted. I, also, have nothing to express myself by but my words. Your words are very powerful and heartfelt, and my friend, that is when things come out the best. When you truly know what you are writing, and are able to feel the words as much as a razorblade on your skin. I, too, am looking forward to reading more of your poetry, so indeed, keep 'em coming!! I merely say what's in my heart and you call it a style. Don't put it in a cage, don't mistreat it. You say you're hungry for knowledge... Here it is... EAT IT!! -DMX ~Lil OnE~ |
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