I'm a star - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

patchoulipumpkin
Member

since 2000-01-01

Posts 196
Bermuda

0 posted 2000-01-05 05:42 PM

I wish I was a star, like I was in my dream last night
Not the shiny kind in the sky
But a star on earth
Someone who shines, and people have to protect their eyes
Someone important, a man, a real man who isn’t afraid to be one

I wish I could get angry, spit at people, and tell them they are idiots when they cross my path
I wish I could be like Charles Bukowksi, an alcholic and not be ashamed of it
A louse, loser, and bum and think that it was everybody else who was twisted
I wish I could believe in myself, instead of thinking I should be more like other people

When I wish upon a star, I see who you really are
You are an uncertain itch, that wants to be scratched
But if you do scratch it, you’ll feel you have given yourself away
Become just like the rest of them
A conformist, streamlined, person, someone who is a follower

I’m a leader,
I lead my army of pain against myself every night
Make sure the daggers are stabbed in deep enough so that I scream
So that I know, my screams are something more than you
Something real, that you can’t have
Like stardust high above your world
Shining as bright as I want to be

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

1 posted 2000-01-06 09:31 AM

Really liked this. Stanza three makes me remember someone I knew in other times!
Looking forward to reading more from you.

Jenny Lee

Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

2 posted 2000-01-06 10:59 AM

Patch,

Them's fighting words. Please direct them out and not against yourself.

Lot's of emotion. Strong feelings in your writing. I like this piece alot.

Obstacles cannot crush me. Every obstacle yields to stern resolve. He who is fixed to a star does not change his mind.
--Leonardo DaVinci

[This message has been edited by FreeByrd (edited 01-06-2000).]

Lil OnE
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

3 posted 2000-01-06 01:08 PM

Wow. I can totally relate to this. more than I would like to admit. The last stanza is all too real to me. Self injury is my escape... to know that I am still capable of feeling, because all of my emotions are frozen and my mind is numb. It's the only thing that proves you are still alive... even if you don't want to realize it. This is a wonderful expression of your feelings... keep writing. I liked this much. Looking forward to more!!!

I merely say what's in my heart
and you call it a style.
Don't put it in a cage, don't
mistreat it. You say you're
hungry for knowledge... Here it
is... EAT IT!! -DMX

~Lil OnE~

Niemczak
Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 51

4 posted 2000-01-06 05:15 PM

I understand how you feel. I like the power of your words, and the emotions that you give. If only people took the time to get to know me they would realize that I do have feelings. I just don't know how to show them.

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

5 posted 2000-01-06 05:59 PM

Liked this a lot also. Sometimes I wish I was a star so I could shine and so poeple would see me and know that I'm not just another face, but someone who deserves recognition! Know your feelings well.

JOY

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.