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I am Tired
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I am Tired |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Warning: This is pretty long. And I don't know wether it is good or if it even follows any kind of format for a poem. ( I don't know alot about format and styles and all that other stuff.) So please bear with it and I hope you enjoy it. It got alot of things off my chest.  I am tired... tired of going out of my way to make someone elses life easier while mine gets harder I"m tired of giving everything that i can give and having nothing left for myself I'm tired of being turned away ashamed and laughed at by those same people when I ask for a little help in return I'm tired of struggling day after day to make ends meet just to find myself in the same place or farther behind than the day before I'm tired of my dreams slipping just beyond my reach and getting lost along the way I'm tired of feeling guilty for my sadness and my pain I'm tired of hiding my frustration and my anger Am I not entitled to feel and express my emotions? They are as real as anyone elses I'm tired of wasting my time on people and things that prove unworthy of my caring nature I'm tired of losing pieces of myself and crying wasted tears over every lie and deceit that has been handed to me I'm tired of finding my friends and my lovers to be my greatest enemies I'm tired of accepting all of the wrongs that have been done to me I'm tired of sacrificing my opinions and beliefs to spare the feelings of another I'm tired of letting my voice remain unheard I'm tired of being afraid to open up to people that I meet and showing who I really am I'm tired of thinking that what i have to offer isn't good enough Just because it wasn't for the ones who came before I want to know the value of true friendship I want to achieve my dreams I want to feel real love I want to be happy And I'm tired of wondering wether I deserve it! [This message has been edited by danni (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I'm tired too ! I think you did very well in this piece Danni! Keep writing!!! Jenny Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
You really captured something here and put it into words beautifully. I have sooo been this tired before. You do realize you indeed have a friend here anytime, hmmm!? Welcome back, Happy New year, missed ya! |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Thank you JennyLee. Your support is greatly appreciated. Lostboy-I sure do know I have a friend here Thanks for the wonderful comment and the warm welcome back. Missed you too. And Happy New Year to you! |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
"if" you feel like it and/or have capability, drop me a quick line and tell me how things are going and how new years was lb |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
This is beautifully expressed, kind of reminds me of some of my feelings in the past, and also of a book, I never read but heard was good, entitled "Women Who Love Too Much." I think we sometimes forget to take care of our own needs while letting others deplete our reserves. Hope to see more of your writing. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Danni- YES! I feel the same way. Format doesn't matter, for you have expressed so much in these lines! Stand tall, and even if those people who don't repay the favor or take you for granted, never respect you, who cares? Because you have your own self respect and a whole bunch of people here who will listen and read your poetry! A whole "Family of Friends"!! Keep writing.  JOY |
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mojar Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169granbury, texas, usa |
my dearest danni, only an angel could show the expression and emotion that you have shown and with great courage, i am and will always be here for you, i am your friend. mo |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Septsong- thank you for your comment. It is very true. I just might have to look for that book. Joy-Thank you so much. I know I do! Mo-You are too good to me. Thank you for letting me know I have a friend in you. I am the same for you. Just to let you know, you have made me blush!  Lostboy-i would like to drop you a line. i tried the last time you asked me to about your poem. But I don't think it worked. Any way give me a day to set up my own email address, (because I use my roomates computer), and I'll try again. K? [This message has been edited by danni (edited 01-05-2000).] |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
K dan, I did get the last one and replied, talk to ya soon. |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Lostboy- I set up my email address and just in case you need the address, its danni_h_@hotmail.com. Hope to here from you soon. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
danni- I can really relate to this especially about helping others and not getting it back in return. I hope you do not take this the wrong way but there was a line in there where u repeat dreams.... anyway if it was not intentional it should have been it really made the poem for me.. maybe put it like this "im tired of my dreams .........dreams then go on it would give it more effect at least that is the way I read it. |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Bojopy-thanks for your comments-no the repetition of dreams was not intentional-and don't be silly, of course I would not take that little pointer the wrong way. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I'm glad you did not take that the wrong way. I'm not giving pointers but I realized somtimes ......before a word does alot for a poem. I love hearing pointers too!!!!! oh yeah somtimes poems need to be long to get a thought across.< !signature--> [This message has been edited by Bojopy (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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