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lisaloco
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since 1999-07-07
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0 posted 1999-12-19 01:38 PM


Loneliness

Looking, beyond my vision
to fill the emptiness in me.
Delving, into the depths of the unreal
to find the one thing I can't see.

There is one thing that abounds
in my dreamlike state abyss.
Corrupts my mind, binds my soul.
It's name is loneliness.

Nothing can fill this gaping hole,
this cavernous nothing of my life.
Searching is just a senseless idea,
but an idea that fills all my time.

Surrounded by other bodies
yet not feeling their presence within.
My soul cowers in the darkness of its cave
waiting for the walls to give in.

Hold me if you dare,
try to look into these eyes.
Tell me what lurks in this deep unknown.
The answer you never will find.


© Copyright 1999 lisaloco - All Rights Reserved
FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

1 posted 1999-12-19 01:46 PM


Very Well done. I like this tremendously.

Hope passions will help your loneliness to subside.

Looking forward to your next piece.

-RS

 There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
2 posted 1999-12-19 05:41 PM


Reminds me of a line I once heard -
"They see the painted picture, think they can peel the guise - But they could never understand what goes on behind these eyes."
Good poem, Liked this one alot.

Michael

starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
3 posted 1999-12-20 02:14 AM


"Searching is just a senseless idea, but an idea that fills all my time"--interesting to think about...yes i think most people spend most their time "searching" or atleast i do...I'm liken this poem, lisaloco...

ashley (Starboards)

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"It would take an acrobat, I've already tried all that, I'm gonna let him fly"
-Dixie Chicks
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