That Familiar Feeling (Part I)

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Dark Poetry #1

That Familiar Feeling (Part I)

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 1999-12-17 09:43 PM

This well defies depth.

Roiling and foaming, a vast
Ocean sprawling,
And I, like a lemming
To the sea;

Never
Drowning, but
Never surfacing – lungs burning
For air as the oily
Blackness
Curls
Around my brain …

Cast upon
The shore, litter,
Derelict,
Dragging myself forward
As poisoned waves lick
At the heels of my sanity …

A beast
Clutching
Clawing at my soul
And a soft
Voice whispering
All the while:

You are mine,
You are mine!

You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

1 posted 1999-12-17 11:40 PM

Ouch! It's too late too think!! But this poem made me think and that's why i have great respect for this one...great job! I hope i get to read more of your works, sky!

Starboards

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"You will see a lot of things,
But they will mean nothing to you
If you lose sight of the thing you love."
-from the movie "At First Site"
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Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

2 posted 1999-12-18 01:20 AM

Dark and forbiding yet beautiful well done

What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

lostboy
Member

since 1999-11-21

Posts 275
New Hampshire, USA

3 posted 1999-12-18 12:06 PM

Cool. Right from the opening, this well defies depths, different scenes went through my mind.

Niemczak
Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 51

4 posted 1999-12-18 01:59 PM

This really made me think about so many different angles that you could portray this. I really liked it.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

5 posted 2000-01-05 11:47 AM

Straightforward and beautiful Kess.
Liked very much my friend...can't pick a favorite line,as all are so good

Jennifer

Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

Bojopy
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 391

6 posted 2000-01-06 02:25 AM

Oh my gosh what did I just read..wait I did'nt read it I felt it.... just riveting....right to the core of my soul

Shirleeah Storey
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 68
Delaware

7 posted 2000-01-06 10:40 AM

Oh, wow!! This is powerful stuff!! Keep up the work!

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