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Niemczak
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since 1999-12-15
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0 posted 1999-12-15 08:00 PM


I don't know if this will be alowwed to go up, but I wrote this when I was filled with alot of pain and I did not know what to do.

I can feel it now
as it touches my arm.
The blade that I use
to end my days
filled with pain and misery.

Lightly touching, gently caressing
I begin to press

Upon my face tears being to fall
from the pain that I have caused
and the sorrow felt by all.

I begin to press,
I can feel the end now.


 

© Copyright 1999 Niemczak - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 1999-12-15 08:04 PM


I think It just scrapes through!!  
Hi welcome to the dark forum my friend.

Seems to me you fit right in, nothing too graphic and it'll be fine.  Glad to see you wondered though.

We've all been there, I have never actually held a knife though     Looking forward to your next post..  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
2 posted 1999-12-16 01:24 AM


I can understand this feeling. I have had my share of dealings with this subject. It is such a lonely place to be. I hope things start looking up for you. btw, good poem and WELCOME!  
starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
3 posted 1999-12-16 11:40 AM


Niemczak--
  Sounds like everyone goes through this stage when they are sixteen, i am sixteen myself and i have wondered what it would be like to end it all, but i've realized that nothing is worth killing yourself over...i hope you feel the same way

Welcome!!!

Sven
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4 posted 1999-12-16 01:09 PM


Welcome my friend. . .

Here you will find a home. . . very good. . .

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



JD
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since 1999-11-05
Posts 61
N Prov
5 posted 1999-12-17 10:46 PM


I think ur topic was great and keep up the good work


JD



 Everything Dies



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
6 posted 1999-12-18 12:19 PM


JD I've gotta say this that graphic is horrible!!  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Alwye
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In the space between moments
7 posted 1999-12-18 12:24 PM


I'm 16, and I've been there..exellent work, welcome!  And I must say, that is one spooky graphic..

 *Krista Knutson*

~Only within the depths of the most ominous darkness can the beauty of light truly be understood~


Niemczak
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 51

8 posted 1999-12-18 01:52 PM


That was me thirteen years ago.  I never really looked back and thought about what I was truly thinking then.
Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap
9 posted 1999-12-18 06:55 PM


It is ironic, I think, that we ponder most on death when we have our whole lives ahead of us ...

This was tastefully done; not graphic at all.  Leaves the end open to interpretation.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

10 posted 1999-12-19 03:31 PM


It's been a long time since I was sixteen. In my years hanging around here, I have learned one thing. Death is just an end to this time around. There are a lot of things you have to learn, be it in this life or the next. No use in cutting it short.

Good work.

-RS    

 There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix



Michael
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since 1999-08-13
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11 posted 1999-12-19 05:20 PM


I think many of us have felt this way at time...  Isis, is right, this "squeaks" through, but I am seriously more concerned with your well being at this point than judging your poem.  If there is anything at all you feel you need to talk about, please know you always have friends in Isis and myself you can reach out to,  I hope things get brighter for you soon.


Michael

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