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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Dear Mister Editor; I found an error in the news that I would like to mention With hopes that you are kind enough to give it your attention, For, on the page announcing deaths, I found it rather queer That, though I searched from start to end, my name did not appear. Although it is a small mistake, I feel, in my condition, That I deserve at very least a little recognition. I can't believe you didn't know that I had passed away. You spelled the name right of my wife we buried yesterday. Or did you think those left behind can just go right on living, Faced with only emptiness and nothing left for giving? Taken from the only thing that kept my heart alive, How is it possible you'd think that I could still survive? Your writers on the evening shift must have heard the sound My torn heart made the moment that they placed her in the ground. Perhaps they thought a cold wind rose and blew with icy breath Instead of knowing it was me within the throes of death. Now that I have done my best to bring this fact to light I'm sure that you are willing to correct your oversight. Tomorrow in the morning news, please try to tell my side For, though I breathe, I feel as though I were the one who died. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Oh Mike...You have successfully torn my heart from my chest. This piece is just wonderful. So very.....I don't have the words to express the pain and loss discribed here.  You never fail to leave me breathless. [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 12-15-1999).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Don't think my first response turned out, if it did I'll erase one.. Balladeer this was superb and sad, you can rip them my friend can't you? Thanks for coming over to share that with us all  What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Thanks for sharing this with us all.... Jenny Lee Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Marilyn, if I did, it must have left a big hole because you certainly have a huge heart. Thank you. Isis....Thank you. The pleasure is mine. Jenny Lee...I appreciate you words. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Balladeer, this is heartwrenching to say the least. I was moved by this piece. Well written my friend. APPLAUDS!!!!! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
You are way more than welcome Dear Balladeer Jenny |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, so you do have a touch of Darkness in you. This was an exceptional piece, Balladeer. Reminded me of my grandfather after my grandmother passed away. He lost the shine in his eyes, the zest for life. In essance, he died too. Great work, thank you for visiting the Dark Forum. I hope you will more often. Michael |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hoot, I am always honored by your approval. Yes, Michael, I'm sure we do all have a little inside. It was good being here. I'll be back for sure. Thank you. |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Balladeer, I like this one!! Very thought provoking! Please grace us w/your writings more often! starboards |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW! Look what I stumbled upon when looking for something else! Pass the tissues please! This is excellent, Balladeer! I'm glad I found it! Denise |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
MM....you surprize me! Thought you were an old softy. Now I see you are indeed multi talented. Smooth, man, smooth. Liked alot! |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Balladeer... When i first came to "passionate forums"...I fell in love with your work. You kept me coming back. I began posting my own. But...found my home hear in Dark Passions. But I always enjoy your work. Carman |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
How bout that. I happened in here and what do I find? A tear jerker of a heart breakin poem! Excellent, just excellent! |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Balladeer this really hit me in a spot I never knew I had. You definitley need to post here more often! When a loved one dies they always take a little of you with them. This was so sad and so true.....Well done Bojopy "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
I love the way this poem is written You seem to capture so much so well Thanks Richard |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Wow, this is truly amazing. I have tried so many times to reply to this but my computer hasn't let me. Great job. You have such a great gift. One touch of nature makes the whole world kin. -William Shakespeare |
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summer Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 80long beach .ca.usa |
this is one of the best peices i have ever read. my tears are now welling uncontrolably..im not real sure what to say at this point i am actually speechless and for a poet that is rare. You did a perfect job here in expressing yourself. thank you for touching my heart |
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