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FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

0 posted 1999-12-15 03:34 PM

Descending on me
Unexpectedly

Twisting nerves
Blocking impulses

Unable to discern
Image or light

Pillaging every thought
Temporary cessation of vital functions

Debilitated consciousness
Supraliminal

Force majeure
My braincase implodes

Dazed and confused
Yet free of your tenacious grasp

Cognizant of the damage
Regaining mental domain

Relishing now what is only venial pain
Until you choose to ravage my mind

Once Again

There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 1999-12-15 05:36 PM

My God FB this was spectacular you should be thrilled with this one!!

What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

2 posted 1999-12-15 06:45 PM

Truly exquisite RS...I really like this very much

Jenny Lee

Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

danni
Senior Member

since 1999-11-20

Posts 688
wisconsin

3 posted 1999-12-16 01:03 AM

I agree. This is definately a piece to be proud of. Very well done FB.

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

4 posted 1999-12-16 07:32 PM

I echo everyone. Truely amazing!

starboards

FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

5 posted 1999-12-16 08:45 PM

While I'm still fairly close to the top THANK YOU Starboards. I'd like to thank you Isis,JennyLee, danni and again Starboards for your generous words. I have to apologize for not responding to your comments on some of my last pieces. But I had placed a suggestion in the suggestion box forum concerning two items. One being that I did not think that an authors reply should send their work back to the top again. As stubborn as I am, I believe this should not happen.

But the price paid is not letting your friends know how much you appreciate their words of encouragement.

I am truely sorry if I offended you because I didn't reply.

LOVE YOU

-RS

There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 1999-12-17 05:14 PM

Great piece, Free Byrd.
And I agree with you on the "author's replies" too.

Michael

JD
Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 61
N Prov

7 posted 1999-12-18 12:03 PM

Very intersting

JD

Everything Dies

Niemczak
Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 51

8 posted 1999-12-18 02:07 PM

I don't know if I fully understand this one or not, but I really like how it flows.

FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

9 posted 1999-12-19 01:33 PM

Niemczak,
Somtimes the words can obscure the simplicity of the message. But I find that this is the only way to convey what I am really feeling at the time.

I wrote this while having an extremely painful headache that lodged itself right behind one eye. It almost incapacitated me. That's about it.

ThanXs to all of you for responding.

-RS

There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix

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