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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 1999-12-12 06:14 PM


Look and really see for once,
All that you have done,
The hate filled world you've created,
We can't even see the sun.

You have to hurt others,
It's a need for you now,
Don't want any happiness,
It's something you won't allow.

Breathe in deeply, what do you smell?
The putrid scent of hatred,
Is this how you want it to be?
Is this how our lives are fated?

House of love so dreary now,
No matter how I try to clean it,
It's unloved like it's mistress somehow,
No longer a refuge but a prison unit.

So, are you happy you spawn from hell?
Thrilled with my lack of delight?
You embrace the dark world alone now,
For I will not partake in your plight.

 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


© Copyright 1999 Isis - All Rights Reserved
danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 1999-12-13 02:19 AM


Wow Isis. I can really feel that anger in this one. Especially at the end. I love the "spawn from hell" thing. It makes me think of someone I know.  
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 1999-12-13 02:24 AM


Thanks Danni, was pretty ornery when I wrote it!!  


 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Medevil blue
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since 1999-12-12
Posts 4

3 posted 1999-12-13 05:55 AM


I have to agree with Danni on this one, its filled anger and resentment don't you think?.
I like poems filled with wrath, it's something fresh.

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From the mud to the stars
  -To kill a Mockingbird

Medevil blue
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since 1999-12-12
Posts 4

4 posted 1999-12-13 05:56 AM


Really loved this one

It has a fresh approach to anger and resentment

Good one!  

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From the mud to the stars
  -To kill a Mockingbird

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 1999-12-13 06:04 AM


Why thankyou Medevil Blue and welcome to the Dark Forum  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 1999-12-13 04:23 PM


Powerful Isis. . . very powerful. . .

I can really feel the anger that you hold within yourself. . . you express it well, if only others could express their anger in this way. . .



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
7 posted 1999-12-13 06:07 PM


I truly loved the way you expressed anger and hatred in this heartfelt and ingenious piece of work dear lady

 If all who are born are ment to die, I should not have been born, for I will never die.

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
8 posted 1999-12-13 08:32 PM


Maybe you should be ornery more often if the results...produce this  

Jenny

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
9 posted 1999-12-13 10:29 PM


Thanks  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
10 posted 1999-12-13 10:38 PM


Good for you my sister! You don't let him drag you down into his game. Bravo! Bravo!!
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