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moshpit
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since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines

0 posted 1999-12-12 05:23 AM



What Were You Thinking?

What the hell was I thinking
     When I said those words to you
A steady stream of epithets
     Vulgar, but undeniably true.

Was I so insensitive?
     A selfish, cruel fiend.
A devil dressed in angel's robes
     Cunning, vicious and unmistakably mean.

Did I cause you to cry?
     Did I cause you pain?
Didn't you whince when I said those words?
     Didn't you cry when I said them again?

Didn't I cry when you did the same to me?
Didn't I lose my remaining sanity?
Didn't I spend my days courting death?
Wasting away my soul, my every living breath.

What the hell were you thinking
     When u did that thing to me?

    

© Copyright 1999 guile canencia - All Rights Reserved
medusa
Junior Member
since 1999-12-09
Posts 23

1 posted 1999-12-12 06:14 AM


that was brillance i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!you did that topic so much better than my vague attempt!!!!i must read more of your work!!!!
suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
2 posted 1999-12-12 01:24 PM


Tis a great piece of work you have added to this place mosh, and I truly hope to read more.

 If all who are born are ment to die, I should not have been born, for I will never die.

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
3 posted 1999-12-12 03:15 PM


Brilliant indeed. This piece speaks volumes. Great work mosh. I too look forward to more. Welcome!  
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 1999-12-12 06:17 PM


Welcome to the dark Forum  
What a wonderful first piece, just what we like.  I really enjoyed it.  It says so much.  Eagerly awaiting more!!  

 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


~Red~
Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 36
chicago, Ill-na, u.s.a.
5 posted 1999-12-12 11:48 PM


OOOOhhhhhhh!!!!! i really liked this too! i can feel it, that makes it even more kewlz...can't wait to hear more!!  

 ~Why is it that you beleive in perfection my friend? For perfection is a dream, it shall never be acheived. So tell me why you beleive in perfection?....For PErfection doesn't exist..~

moshpit
Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines
6 posted 1999-12-13 12:32 PM


thanx guys.. i really was nervous about posting something here but now i look forward to contributing more.  thanx a lot..
Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 1999-12-13 04:33 PM


Excellent!!

This is good. . . there is nothing sometimes so satisfying as giving back what you get. . .

Welcome my friend. . .

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



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