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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
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Sunny Queensland

0 posted 1999-12-11 05:45 PM



I've been a daze for  many a day,
But at last I've seen the light,
Frigtened concerns
Always ready for a fight.

They mock
But you fail to see,
Then you expect understanding,
From beaten down me?

There's a dead cow there,
Period pain daily,
The fertile lands are dying,
And I know in my heart you won't save me.

Exile in the mind and soul,
Your journey will be alone,
Brief respites along the way,
Heart made of stone.

Then from afar,
Near the deep well of desire,
I turned and ran to the car,
Drove towards the fire.

Better to burn
Then be beaten down again..


 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


© Copyright 1999 Isis - All Rights Reserved
danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 1999-12-11 09:44 PM


This was very powerful Isis. I really enjoy an intense read. But I think it would be better to go out with a fight. You don't have to be beaten and you don't have to burn. If nobody else will fight for you then you must fight for yourself, and fight to win!  
suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
2 posted 1999-12-12 01:10 PM


Powerful indeed this one is I must say though you need not die before your time is up and you have plenty of time left, douse the fire and beat the beater.

 If all who are born are ment to die, I should not have been born, for I will never die.

captaincargo
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since 1999-11-25
Posts 109
Corning, N.Y. U.S.A.
3 posted 1999-12-12 02:08 PM


Sometimes the fire seems to be the only place offering warmth.

Very good, as I am now depressed.  


 Cap. Carg.

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 1999-12-12 05:46 PM


Captain Cargo didn't mean to depress you sorry  
Danni and SD thanks so much for the support, life is a series of obstacles I'm taking them one at a time!!  


 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Sven
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5 posted 1999-12-13 04:30 PM


Sing on Isis. . . sing on. . . don't give up. . . there is always hope. . . flame on with the purest of fire. . .

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
6 posted 1999-12-13 05:56 PM


Why thanks Sven, I never stop fighting, never ......  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
7 posted 1999-12-13 08:17 PM


Isis,
This sucked me right in. Absolutely well done  

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