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Sven
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0 posted 1999-12-10 11:20 AM


Her eyes speak to me with love
Two beautiful pools of blue
Showing me an angel sent from above
With skin of fairest hue. . .

I can see the pain they hide
And feel the tears that have been shed
But through the pain I can see the beauty reside
A beauty dying, that needs to be fed

Spring forth beautiful one,
From behind the mask that you've hidden.
Show us your eyes of blue and hair like the sun
And of your pain be ridden. . .


 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



© Copyright 1999 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
danni
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1 posted 1999-12-10 02:40 PM


This is a very beautiful poem Sven. I don't know if I've said it before, but I love reading your work. It truly speaks to me. But for this one I replaced the blue eyes with green while reading it.  
Isis
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2 posted 1999-12-10 07:01 PM


Sven, This is beautiful.  Isn't it funny how we like certain eye colours?  Having blue eyes myself I love to look into deep brown eyes.  Strange that.
Anyway this work speaks volumes  


 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Michael
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3 posted 1999-12-11 05:43 AM


Wonderful poem, Sven.  It's hard to see that kind of  pain in someone, and never know if they will "spring forth", as you say.


Michael



JennyLee
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4 posted 1999-12-11 02:35 PM


I was never partial to any eye color....until
I peered into a pair of endless steel blue eyes...


Truly a beautiful piece  


jenny


 Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


medusa
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5 posted 1999-12-12 03:42 AM


sven magnificent! powerful yet subtle!
~Red~
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6 posted 1999-12-13 12:06 PM


oh, i like this lotts! it's really beautiful. great job!

 ~Why is it that you beleive in perfection my friend? For perfection is a dream, it shall never be acheived. So tell me why you beleive in perfection?....For PErfection doesn't exist..~

Medevil blue
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7 posted 1999-12-13 06:01 AM


It's perfect!

Wonder whom is this poem dedicated for?


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From the mud to the stars
  -To kill a Mockingbird

Jaguar
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8 posted 1999-12-13 06:05 AM


I know I have said this to you a thousand times before, but you're a reallly good poet.
You're a really talented person, keep up the good work, Sven.

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There is no more turning back this way
The path is overgrown and strewn with thorns
They've torn the lifeblood from your naked eyes
Cast aside to be forlorn..

  -Sarah McLachlan

Skyfyre
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9 posted 1999-12-13 01:46 PM


"Spring forth"

Those two words speak volumes in themselves.  They speak of something sudden, perhaps even violent -- an interesting way to look at recognition of self.  'Tis always fraught with uncertainty.

Well done.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.



Sven
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10 posted 1999-12-13 04:21 PM


Thank you all for your words. . . they mean a lot. . .

I have brown eyes myself. . . but have always been partial to green and blue eyes. . .



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



danni
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11 posted 1999-12-14 02:56 AM


Uh-oh. I'm beginning to think I'm weird.  
Nah, just jokin'. I had put myself in this beautiful poem, that's where the green eyes came from. But since everyone's putting in their preference i just had to add mine. I've always been kinda partial to brown or green. So, there's my two cents, and I've probably rambled on more than I should have. I'll just be going now.  


[This message has been edited by danni (edited 12-14-1999).]

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