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Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 1999-12-09 12:40 PM


I am here
Never seen
Sudenly I
try to breath
Although I
Never on my life
Took the
Light from
Your life

Onto battle I hear you cry all aroundbabies die
Now war now strife I leave you now to live your life

Try i will changing your mind
Overwraught with jealous pride
Passing life right on by

Oh to be young and be not me
Fighting alone for dignity

Tight the shackles
Hide our breed
Evermore the cannons take our feed

How I long for yesterday
Everything was not so far away
Again I long to here the sound of my
Paradise under the ground

 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

© Copyright 1999 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
Neala
Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262
Florida, USA
1 posted 1999-12-09 07:45 PM


That is very true, dark, and stright to the point! I like a lot!
-Neala
(Goddesses of Sadness)

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 1999-12-09 08:12 PM


Dark and longing, Well done as always Walter!!  

 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
3 posted 1999-12-09 08:38 PM


This to me seemed to have 2 meanings one of war and one of a lost love or friend,
but oh well now that ive probably made a fool of myself for being wrong I think this is a great and saddening poem yet so true.


 If all who are born are ment to die, I should not have been born, for I will never die.

Walter Poe
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

4 posted 1999-12-10 05:55 AM


In case no one noticed (although im sure you have)

The title spells out the begining of each line

I
N
S
T
A
N
T
L
Y  etc



 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

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