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Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 1999-12-07 11:42 AM



As I sit here
Up her in my high place
I look down
at the darkness
engulfing me
But i am safe
In my high place
with the darkness
way down below

All my life
In my safe place
with danger
far below
I am cold
here up high
i wish i could run
Climb or crow

Safety's over
Says my safe place
way up high
now far below
the darkness
now round my ankles
So now we have
nowhere to go

touch me deep
In my soul
The darkness goes
Inside of me
Now i poluted
In the dark world
Into darkness
see me go

Now i've long
forgotten safety
Long ago did
brightness go
All alone
in the darkness
All alone
I miss it so


 Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace,
of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd

© Copyright 1999 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
kari
Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA
1 posted 1999-12-07 10:18 PM


I like the way you lowered yourself in, as the poem went.  There could be lots of explanations for this poem, but what I got from it was that you were once happy and now you have fallen into some kind of depression.  The safety was more like the comfort that you felt.  Is it something along the lines of an emotional problem or more physically (like, in the world)?  Whatever it is- I really enjoyed it.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 1999-12-07 10:25 PM


I really liked this... my advice?  Come down out of the safety zone and allow your heart and soul to open up, trust and love again!!  Is that along the right lines?  

 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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