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starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida

0 posted 1999-11-28 08:47 PM


*** I would like everyone to know that this is one of my happier poems! I'm trying! I promise!!***


It was a perfect day
and a perfect night
the sky was cloudless
and the moon, our only light

I can still smell you
a scent that drove me insane
It made me want to hold you
especially when the rain came

But the rain didnt stop us
In fact, it didnt even slow us down
Our love grew until that night
the night that the end came around

It was so unexpected
and so heartbreaking
This was an unjustly abuse
that my heart was taking

It took a while to let it go
to get past the denial
Meanwhile, i hid my feelings
behind a simple smile

Looking back
realizing that it wasnt a mistake
That it was simply just a chance
I decided to take

So I challenge others
to face such a fate
to love someone so dearly
that your heart never has a steady rate

To be infatuated with their smile
and with their touch
This feeling, the greatest in the world,
is what I will miss so much

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"


[This message has been edited by starboards (edited 11-28-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Ashley Keenan - All Rights Reserved
ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
1 posted 1999-11-28 08:51 PM


I'll take you up on your challenge It certainly opens us up for a lot of pain and suffering... but the chance that it will work and we would get to experience something SO beautiful is well worth the risk in my book. Great Job

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be

starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
2 posted 1999-11-28 08:54 PM


Thanks thunderkyss,
I'm glad that you enjoyed it! Everyone should experence love, this is true, because with out it no one really lives! Thanks for responding!

starboards

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Deverone
Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA
3 posted 1999-11-28 08:56 PM


Good for you.....

Well said ...well spoken and.....
well penned.

As for the challange... I would agree with Thunder....scary as it may seem I too would risk my heart for the feelings of feeeling WONDERFUL, even if it were for only for a moment or so... is well worth it.

GREAT JOB.


Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 1999-11-28 08:56 PM


Beautiful Starboards!! Without love of some kind in our lives we have nothing, are nothing. It really DOES make the world go round. Well done

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
5 posted 1999-11-28 09:00 PM


Isis-
I love posting poems in here because you always make special note to reply to mine...making my day everytime!!

Deverone--
Your replys are always motivating too me! I'm glad you agreed with what i had to say in my poem!

Thanks again guys!!!

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
6 posted 1999-11-28 09:08 PM


Hey little sister that's what we mother hens are supposed to do. Wanna be my online little sister? It feels like a sisterhood already doesn't it????????

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
7 posted 1999-11-28 09:11 PM


Yeah, big sis, i'll be your lil sis! I love looking up to someone!!!

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
8 posted 1999-11-29 12:07 PM


Stop this looking up nonsense, just two friends with a sisterhood of love of poetry between them ok? Besides you are probably taller than me anyhow.

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



Stevia
Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 28

9 posted 1999-11-29 03:46 AM


I loved your poem. Risks is what love is all about. I k now it from experience.Thanks .
Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
10 posted 1999-11-29 04:49 AM


Well, starboards, everytime I "love" someone my heart seems to just plain stop dead in it's tracks....LOL But I'll never stop loving for life would be pointless without the effort.

michael

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