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summer
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 80
long beach .ca.usa

0 posted 1999-11-27 02:15 AM


Its cold in here.Probly because im alone now. It wasnt always like this ya know.There was fire in me,it would burn for hours.My touch was smooth. My voice was soft and caring.My eyes said nothing short of love and passion.I was told I even tasted sweet. Now my touch feels like swift daggers,that fire has been replaced by cold rejection,my eys have hate and disapointment in them and my voice.....well my voice you cant even here anymore.But darling who ever you may be dont give up on me just yet I long to be restored.To feel my own blood running thru my veins.Im so cold here.
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lostboy
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since 1999-11-21
Posts 275
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 1999-11-27 09:32 AM


I love the "who ever you may be, don't give up on me" line. To beleive someone's out there looking for you as you look for them keeps the heart strong. I hear your voice. "Warmest" wishes to you!!
summer
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 80
long beach .ca.usa
2 posted 1999-11-27 12:51 PM


thank you lost boy for your interest and encouraging words ...I know one day it will happen im just being taught patience right now...
FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

3 posted 1999-11-27 05:39 PM


Summer,
I believe I'm starting to here your voice. That's the first step. Hang in there with us and we'll get that fire burning in you again.

Nice work

-RS

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Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 1999-11-27 05:47 PM


Your inner flame never goes out!! Only weakens.. Stoke it, feed it, and you'll be similing and radiating again

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
5 posted 1999-11-28 09:18 PM


Summer--
The line about being so cold makes me shiver...you must be really hurting right now...if you need to talk you can email me anytime, k?

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
6 posted 1999-11-28 09:44 PM


Summer... This is heartfelt and moving, it sounds like you are on the right track I know you will be someones "fire" again, I can feel it in the passion of your writing.

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be

Deverone
Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA
7 posted 1999-11-29 08:49 AM


Your touch will be smooth once again
your voice will be louder than ever
your eyes will see that Love
you will taste sweeter than before

But most of all your fire
will be enough for two hearts.

WARMEST wishes sent to help you along the way.



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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---



summer
Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 80
long beach .ca.usa
8 posted 1999-11-29 02:37 PM


TO EVERYONE WHO REPLIED...YA KNOW THIS ONE CAME STRAIGHT FROM MY HEART ..I MEAN I USUALLY RIGHT THEM IN MY JOURNAL FIRST THEN SUBMIT THEM BUT I JUMPED RIGHT IN THE FORUM AND JUST STARTED WRITING ...AND HERE IT IS..THANKYOU FOR THE WORDS OF ENCOURAGMENT AND CARING....
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