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BlOoD TiEs Junior Member
since 1999-10-02
Posts 30New York City |
I wonder the urban jungle With a gun and a shovel looking for a decent grave to my body I'm no longer a slave Looking for a decent grave I know my choice was not brave pondering what will be of my soul As I the coward, lost control Pondering what will be of my soul will I be trapped in my little hole I question if there is an afterlife Away from my pain and safe from strife I question if there is an afterlife, I never prayed and I lived by the knife, Whats the punishment for my unholy deed? Is mine the character in which evil may feed Whats the punishment for my unholy deed? Will I be ready to pay for all my greed? Is there a hell where many have burned? Will the pain I inflicted be returned? Is there a hell where many have burned? Am I just like them, is my soul doomed? The evil deep inside them, there mind consumed, Will my life of torment be resumed? The evil deep inside them, there mind consumed, I have found my little hole to be entumbed The choice was not mine, it was written by fate. Hell should should hear me knocking and open up the gate The choice was not mine it was written by fate Any doubts I have now have come to late I have givin myself a mortal blow I did not know I would be dying this slow ------------------ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Scary dark stuff my friend  ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there is to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
This is well done, the last verse hits me to the core! Jenny Lee ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
This is really good.....makes me think about some of the things I have done that I wish I could take back. VERY Good indeed. ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
If we could just have that do-over. I know I'd be happier. I see the gravity of this character's position, I can only hope it is a perspective piece, but guaging from the depth of feeling with which you have expressed this work, I get the feeling my hope is in vain. This is excellent writing, Ties. I look for more from you, and anxiously. DB |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Deeply Dark, BloodTies, welcome to the Dark Forum. Michael |
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BlOoD TiEs Junior Member
since 1999-10-02
Posts 30New York City |
wow thanx for all the nice replies truly apreciated ------------------ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
 You are welcome Blood Ties!! Keep 'em coming!! ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
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sugarr New Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 1Canada |
Reeally good poem...I enjoyed it. |
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