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starboards
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0 posted 1999-11-21 06:11 PM


*I just took a 5 hour bus trip so I wrote lots of poems, in case you are wondering *

Just memorys
left behind
of what I had loved
and of what was once mine

Such memories
so cold and unkind
still haunt me in my sleep
and play constantly in my mind

But that's all that they are
just memories after all
a time when my heart opened
and then took the fall

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

© Copyright 1999 Ashley Keenan - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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1 posted 1999-11-21 06:17 PM


Loved this, but a question, was it a good fall or a bad fall???????

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there is to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
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2 posted 1999-11-21 06:19 PM


extremely BAD fall, isis, extremely bad!!
Isis
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3 posted 1999-11-21 06:22 PM


Wanna talk hon? Please email me, I'm here if you like??? But Not all your memories are bad??

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there is to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
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4 posted 1999-11-21 06:27 PM


yes this is true, but what is going on right now it seems as if they are all bad, i explained everything in my email

ashley

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
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Northwestern, NJ.
5 posted 1999-11-21 10:07 PM


Glad you took the bus trip
Gives one time to write!
Liked this alot.


Jenny Lee

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.



Deverone
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since 1999-10-13
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San Antonio, Tx, USA
6 posted 1999-11-22 01:03 AM


I can definately relate to this....

Those memories you speak of will eventually find a place to be quiet in the back of your mind and the haunting will cease, and be no more....they will stop playing.

This hits very close....very nice.

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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---



Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
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By a big lake
7 posted 1999-11-22 05:53 PM


Somethin' about buses, isn't there? If it creates a spark like this, Let's all hop a Greyhound.

DB

Michael
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since 1999-08-13
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8 posted 1999-11-22 08:12 PM


Man, those bus trips can do wonders for your poetic endeavors, can't they. I took a bus from L.A. to Washington D.C. earlier this year...and never wrote so much in my life. Great poem, btw.

Michael

FreeByrd
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

9 posted 1999-11-23 10:40 AM


It's a dog of a way to get around.

Looks like the free time paid off though.

I like this... movin on kinda stuff

Yea, I like this.

-RS

lostboy
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since 1999-11-21
Posts 275
New Hampshire, USA
10 posted 1999-11-23 11:04 AM


Hits close to a lot of us I'd bet. Sorry about your bad fall and hope it's all up from here. Thinking of ya!!!
starboards
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longwood, florida
11 posted 1999-11-23 07:31 PM


I would just like everyone to know that, yes i am hurting right now, but this is the way i write my poems, i cant write of good things, because bad things let the words flow right out, do you understand? I know that it seems as if i'm suicidal but i'm not really, i'm actually getting better as the days go on...thanks for your help and support guys, without you i dont know what i would be feeling right now...thanks again!

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Isis
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12 posted 1999-11-23 08:10 PM


Thanks Starboards, that's what we are here for!!! Battle on my friend, and we'll be right here with you ((HUGS))

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
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13 posted 1999-11-23 08:22 PM


Isis--
I've been watching you respond to many poems and i've even read the congrats dedicated too you for becoming a moderator...i would just like to say that too me ur a "mother hen" and that I always feel like I have someone to talk too..i'm glad that you are here, thanks again !!

ashley

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Isis
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14 posted 1999-11-23 08:44 PM


Oh Ashley, that is such a lovely thing to say. Mother Hen Isis! I am here for you and anyone else who is interested ANY TIME. So PLEASE feel free to email me anytime. I will ALWAYS respond. Honey you've just made my day!!!




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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



starboards
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since 1999-10-14
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longwood, florida
15 posted 1999-11-23 10:06 PM


Isis--
well u made my day so i had to make yours...u truely are a wonderful person and i will always look up too you...thanks again!



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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
16 posted 1999-11-23 10:48 PM


Thank YOU again Starboards, the friendship I welcome, the looking up to part is unnecessary, we're all caring here, each and everyone.........

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The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



J_Jeter2
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since 1999-10-13
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Longwood Fl, 32779
17 posted 1999-11-26 03:19 PM


Hey hun you know who it is....I really liked this and you know that when ever you need me I'm here.
starboards
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since 1999-10-14
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longwood, florida
18 posted 1999-11-28 07:41 AM


JESSICA!!! your not supposed to read this (she's my friend in class) oh well...see u at school!

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

Giggles
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since 1999-11-21
Posts 15

19 posted 1999-11-28 03:26 PM


Hey starboards,
seems like we're both going through the same thing right now. (remember "it's not okay"?)I know how much it hurts to fall. I think you were reading MY mind!! E-mail me if you want to share, id be happy to talk, anytime.

starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
20 posted 1999-11-28 08:39 PM


Thanks giggles,
I think everyone goes through this at one time in their life, but we all will get over it at some point...it will just hurt until we do...i dont really need to talk about it...actually i'm sort of getting over it...but thanks anyway...so glad that i read your mind!! keep writing and i'll keep reading k??

ashley

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

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