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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 1999-11-15 10:19 PM


The great highway of my life,
Fledgling journeys began some 30 years ago,
Hard times, trying times, joyful too,
When encased in trouble, time moves so slow.

The journey of my lifetime,
Planned from the start,
To experience mortal highs and lows
That could tear my world apart.

Emotionally a changeling,
Becoming a lion or lamb,
Always striving, putting my best foot forward,
Until into a wall I slam.

I am outside watching,
A rumbo in my hand,
Memories soft, the wind is warm,
Somewhere close by a baby was born.

From afar the beast appeared,
One of my own creations,
Today the beast is discontentment,
Slow in adaptation.

Onyx eyes bored into me,
Upon the midnight hour,
Nothing could save me now,
No matter what it's power.

I struggle to gain a form,
To save my identity,
Darkness closing in, hemming me in,
Only a sob escapes from me.

The beast he turns and scuttles away,
Leaving behind a faceless body,
The mirror agrees it is so,
Now I only need compete with silence...

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


© Copyright 1999 Isis - All Rights Reserved
Deverone
Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA
1 posted 1999-11-16 01:06 AM


WOW.......and WOW again....I don't know what else to say. I feel like you have touched upon many emotions that have been swirling within me that I never noticed before.

VERY intriguing read....Well done!!!

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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
2 posted 1999-11-16 01:54 AM


Wow, this poem turned on me, I would have not expected it to end this way in reading the begining stanzas...and no, that is not bad in any way. Wonderful poem, Isis, just got better and better.


michael

Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
3 posted 1999-11-16 09:11 AM


First of all, Congrats.
Secondly, This is superb. I just keep going back to the read again and again.

DB

FreeByrd
Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267

4 posted 1999-11-16 09:23 AM


Glad to see you are a Moderator. I know you will do a wonderful job.

Walls, one I remembered referred to as a curtain. Do come down if we want them too.

Insightful piece...

-RS

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 1999-11-16 05:30 PM


Thanks Deverone
Thanks Michael didn't realise it was what it is!!!
Thanks DB why do you like this one so much??
Thanks Free Byrd, they come down, and another is built, it goes on, but you deal

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
6 posted 1999-11-16 05:37 PM


The first thing is the feeling of utter despair, no hope of rescue, no relief found in stanza 6.

Secondly is the juicy set-up from stanza 1 to 4. Just waiting to be threatened from afar in 5 and torn asunder in 7 & 8

How's that Winged Goddess?

DB


Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 1999-11-16 05:40 PM


Wonderful!! I like to know WHY people like it and WHAT appeals about it you know?? That's all!! Thanks for responding David (HUGS)

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


For_Never
Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 125
Cincinnati, oh, United States of America
8 posted 1999-11-16 11:12 PM


Very thoughful... it cuts home, in more places than the heart...
The title struck me as well... changling, to be able to be another person... but...that I think is false hope... we all have our own beezle'bubs, don't we?

EAB

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
9 posted 1999-11-16 11:31 PM


Thanks EAB, we can be what we want to be emotionally and spiritually at least, I belive this wholeheartedly...

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
10 posted 1999-11-19 01:46 PM


I go away and you write your heart out and become Moderator too Congrats Warrior Princess!! I think this one is great...as always.

Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


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