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suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA

0 posted 1999-11-14 10:04 PM


I feel so used,
My flesh feels so torn,
Torn and used by the strings,
The strings of control.

The strings of control,
Hold me on this stage called earth,
move me about the stage,
I have no control.

I have no control,
As the strings cannot be broken,
They will control always,
My muscles are useless.

My muscles are useless,
Helping me not to free myself,
Keeping me imprisoned,
I feel so used.

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life is short kill quick


[This message has been edited by suicidal dreams (edited 11-14-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Tom - All Rights Reserved
Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
1 posted 1999-11-14 10:07 PM


NIce work ehre Tom, I think It would be better if the last line was the same as the first- juts MHO.....

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
2 posted 1999-11-14 10:07 PM


Puppet T, Who holds thy strings so mercilessly?

Enjoyed this. From one marionette to another,Great stuff!

DB

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And the men who hold high places
Must be the ones who start
To mold a new reality
Closer to the heart.
===RUSH===

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 1999-11-15 06:26 AM


On this stage called earth
No words Tom to express just how precise you are here. And what a cruel stage this planet
can be at times....excellent Dearest One


Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
4 posted 1999-11-15 06:31 PM


Thanks to all thee great poets to be or who are that have responded to this.

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life is short kill quick

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 1999-11-15 06:48 PM


We are all just puppets on a string in ways.But Pinnochio changed and so can you.

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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