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Yoin
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since 1999-11-09
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0 posted 1999-11-14 12:56 PM



Ashes
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How the dregs of love
gather at the bottom of our soul.
A residue from the stench of neglect
and the festered scars of abuse.

Then when the flame has died,
when the warmth is only wispy
tendrils of smoke that elude
our clutching grasp,
they are all that is left.

Ashes of dreams,
ashes of love,
gray, cold, dreadful
ashes.

Yoin

[This message has been edited by Yoin (edited 11-15-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Yoin - All Rights Reserved
JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
1 posted 1999-11-14 02:27 PM


Then when the flame has died,
when the warmth is only wispy
trendils of smoke that elude
our clutching grasp,
they are all that is left....

Such a wistful read for me...
Thanks-for posting this little treasure!!


Jenny


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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.



[This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 11-14-1999).]

Yoin
Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 29

2 posted 1999-11-14 02:30 PM


Thanks for the reply Jenny. I am glad you liked it.

Yoin

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 1999-11-15 10:35 AM


This one is incredible, Yoin. Very gripping. I love this piece.


Michael

Tammy
Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 90

4 posted 1999-11-15 10:38 AM




Yoin,
Absolutly beautiful.
T.

Yoin
Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 29

5 posted 1999-11-16 01:36 PM


Thank you Michael and Tammy for your kind words about my poem.

Yoin

Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
6 posted 1999-11-16 01:52 PM


Yoin, this is sublime!

I really love the short ones. Wish I could be so understandable and concise.

DB

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The little girl on the plane, who turned her doll's head around to look at me...
------Franny & Zooey------
===J.D. Salinger===

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 1999-11-16 06:02 PM


Quite visionary Dr. Freud!! Loved this Yoin

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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