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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
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Sunny Queensland

0 posted 1999-11-13 11:54 PM



In the death throws,
Body spasming uncontroledly,
Blood spews forth like a whale's spouting,
Scent on death hangs in the air.

Where is the saviour?
God bless and god speed?
Nothing to ease the need,
The devil's concubine drops her head and feeds.

Putrid stink,
Carried Heavenbound,
Soul all healed and new,
Putrified death buried below ground.

Oh I want to be there,
Beside the lake full of Pirana,
I want to melt
In the hot molten liquor.

But not tonight my love,
Now is not the time,
Eventually the challenge will come,
You will be the new concubine.

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


© Copyright 1999 Isis - All Rights Reserved
suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
1 posted 1999-11-13 11:58 PM


This one was great like all the others btw niice word usage

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life is short kill quick

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 1999-11-14 12:04 PM


Thanks SD which words did you like if I may ask???

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
3 posted 1999-11-14 12:08 PM


Bassically all the words in the 1st and 4th paragraph

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life is short kill quick

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 1999-11-14 12:21 PM


Thanks SD, interests me why others like something in particular is all!!

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
5 posted 1999-11-14 12:58 PM


Isis, the imagery is great....but I must ask to actually understand the poem, at the risk of sounding dumb, what is a concubine?

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
6 posted 1999-11-14 01:49 AM


Systematic Decay, a concubine is a whore, be it paid or unpaid.....

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
7 posted 1999-11-14 02:50 AM


Now I understand........nice work, Isis.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
8 posted 1999-11-14 12:29 PM


Nice one Isis...reminds me of Saul's Concubines....

Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
9 posted 1999-11-14 05:54 PM


Thanks Jenny Lee

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
10 posted 1999-11-14 10:13 PM


Images of succubial splendor. The picture is so brutal, I cannot look away.

DB

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
11 posted 1999-11-14 10:56 PM


Thanks DB, but you did look away when you hit 'Submit Reply' LOL Thanks hon

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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